TPO-21:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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TPO-21:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Views differ considerably when it comes to whether the social skill is more important than studying hard in school for people to gain success in a future job. As far as I am concerned, social skill plays an more important role than studying hard in one's future career.

First of all, by learning how to relate well to people, students will improve their communication skill , which is very important to their future success in career. In most companies, employees will not only need to coordinate with colleagues from different department, but also need to interact with different customers or partners from the third party companies. Being good at communication will definitely bring students some advantages in the future job as they know how to build good relationship with different personalities, which can not be learned by studying hard.

Moreover, students who have good social skills are able to build a good social network even before they graduate from university, which will benefit them a lot in their future career. For example, graduate students in United States will find it more easier to get a job interview opportunity if their resumes are referred by an employee from the company. In this case, social network becomes very essential as the more referrals they could get, the higher chance they could be selected by a company. Same idea will apply to those who want to set up their own business. The more friends they know, the more potential customers they have.

However, even though social skill does play an important role in most scenario, special case does exist when it refers to some jobs that only require the candidate to be focus on the academic research, so that they do not have to interact with other people at all. When it comes to such special case, it is not deniable that social skill may not be as important as studying hard. But such type of people only account for a very small proportion after all.

In summary, in spite of the exceptional cases, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school because it is an essential ability to have in order to gain success in the future career.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...r as I am concerned, social skill plays an more important role than studying hard ...
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Line 3, column 104, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...s will improve their communication skill , which is very important to their future...
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Line 5, column 246, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
... students in United States will find it more easier to get a job interview opportunity if t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, third, well, after all, for example, in summary, first of all, in spite of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84139784946 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53280980948 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475806451613 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.3338386761 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.642857143 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5714285714 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.85714285714 5.45110844103 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237752092781 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986028221488 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0924039648068 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176031648622 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101586077401 0.0645574589148 157% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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