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This is one of the controversial issues among people because the result of that determines their children' future lives. I completely disagree with that claim that stimulating children by parents to take a part-time job is an appropriate way to prepare children for adult life.
First, it is more likely to waste their time. Nowadays, finding a job becomes one of the people's difficulties because of the unsuitable economic condition in the world since employees prefer to hire an individual who has knowledge about various science. In this circumstance, it is better for the children to utilise their time for learning new skills an,d enlarge their knowledge and information to improve their chance of finding a suitable job in the future instead of wasting their time for doing some part- time job.
Second, another significant reason is that teenage children avoid from the mental disorders. The teenage children can affect the other situation or people sooner than the adult people. They are vulnerable to disappointed or misleading with other people. Since parents must pay attention to the people that they communicate with them. When parents let them work, they are unaware of this fact that the atmosphere of the workplace might not be appropriate for them and some event may damage to their health mentality and have an adverse consequence for them.
Third, the way of the people's lives completely alters during the time. By emerging the technology such as the internet, smartphone, and television people face with a new world. One example of the modern life is the social group which replace with the ordinary way of communication. The social groups provide an excellent opportunity for children to familiarise with new people who help them to see and experience beneficial things. For example, they have this chance to find new friends who are older than them, but they are prosperous in their lives. This friendship is a good way for them to learn how to become a successful adult. So, they do not need to go out and do some job to prepare for the adult life.
In conclusion, there are a lot of advantages such as saving time, avoiding from mental disorders and learning a right way of living convince us that it is better for the teenage children do not do a part-time job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, third, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1905.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92248062016 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68206100756 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498708010336 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.3528551863 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.833333333 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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