TPO 26- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Career is a important part of our lives. It is vital because when people are interested in their field of work productivity and creativeness comes out. Some people believe that children should chose their jobs similar to their parents than to chose jobs that are on their own liking. In my humble opinion, I chose the latter option. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, career are constant in every person's lives. Individual need a job so they can sustain their everyday lifestyle. People has means of paying their meal, house and gas bills with their salary. Following your own passion in life can gain positive outcome in one's life. For instance, individual will excel better in work because he love his job well. He can be productive in work routines and be efficient employee. In addition, individual who loves their work are more happy and optimistic in life. As a result, he can get promoted in work because of his good performance to the company.
Secondly, nowadays children are forced by their parents to follow their footsteps in career. It is because the child will manage their family business and they are the one's who will be responsible taking over the company someday. Many rich people are within this dilemma that they need to take up business and management course because they are the sole heir in the company and they have no choice but to grant their parents wishes. As a result, of following their parents wishes they career and personal life will be compromised. For instance, children will be depressed because they don't like the career their parents chosen. Young adult will become resentful and rebellious to their parents because they are not given the chance to pick what they career they want. Also, upon taking over the family business they will not function properly and not useful because they don't like the things they are doing. Hence, the business will be jeopardize because the children are not interested at all to run their company.
To summarize, I believe that it is more beneficial that children has their own choice to their future career. This is because they will become more proficient and excel better if they like their work.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
Career is a important part of our lives. It is vita...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...on in life can gain positive outcome in ones life. For instance, individual will exc...
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Line 3, column 342, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'loves'.
Suggestion: loves
...al will excel better in work because he love his job well. He can be productive in w...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of his good performance to the company. Secondly, nowadays children are forced b...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...children will be depressed because they dont like the career their parents chosen. Y...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...on properly and not useful because they dont like the things they are doing. Hence, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, i feel, in addition, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1858.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82597402597 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35365954924 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47012987013 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.296261657 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.7826086957 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7391304348 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08695652174 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202754212579 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737355585751 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804758884277 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147649652072 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522724185343 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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