TPO-26 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specific r

As far as im concerned for children its better to follow their parents route because not only can they get alot experiences in that job but also they have more time foe research some new aspects in that job to become more qualified.

The first reason which should be state hear is that children can follow their parents expriences in that job.Infact, when chidren become aware of some point that they must do and must not to do, they will become more qualify and make lower mistakes and can have better and more output.For examples parents that are agriculture can aware of their children from som pests that attack to their farms and may reduce their harvast and how to protect plants from them or they may learn them that which harvest has better growth in specific season.Besides they may avoid from their mistake that they have done before.To make it more clear, in the selling time at first they should sell their product in lesser price than others to increase their customers and after times when this customers are increased , increase their prices.

Another point which deserve some words is that children can have fast learning from parents since if they want to learn all of them from their own it take much time and need some courses that they should pass and can have extra time for considering other new thing in that job.clearly, when they spend their time on learning new things they can become expert in some new things to improve their skills in that job and overcome to other rivals.As an example when they start learning something about which nutrients that increase the plants output they can earn more food and can store them or buying them or they can grow some plants that distract pest from orginal plants and these pest attack to them instead of attacking to orginal plants.

Since what is mentioned above it is recommended that children should do same jobs as their parents do.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, so, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1579.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72754491018 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.13232553978 2.67179642975 80% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479041916168 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 462.6 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 20.6003584229 19% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 83.0 20.1344086022 412% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 312.264711423 48.9658058833 638% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 394.75 100.406767564 393% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 83.5 20.6045352989 405% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.75 5.45110844103 234% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222449372983 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.197600359671 0.076458572812 258% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573339385451 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197600359671 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573339385451 0.0645574589148 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 42.6 11.7677419355 362% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 4.15 58.1214874552 7% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 33.3 10.1575268817 328% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.34 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.02 8.01818996416 125% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 10.002688172 265% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 35.2 10.0537634409 350% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 27.0 10.247311828 263% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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