TPO 29 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays a prime and fundamental controversy about the issue whether univeristy professors must have more salary or not. Some people would claim that working as a university professor is a high ranked job with a high degree of payment. However, as well as I am concerned, I prefer to state that the quality of education is not related to the salaries of the university professors for the following reasons.
The first and foremost reason that should be taken into account is that a great difference between salaries of a professor and an average employee at that place is not fair and may results to problems to other parts of the education system. A relevant example can shed light to this assertion. 3 years ago, when I was a student in bachelor degree of Fine arts, the university decided to increase the salary of the professors and do not change the salary of other hired people. Moreover, the poeple who were able to program for the classes did not do their duties properly and all the students became confused of the scheduled plan for the classes.
The second reason that I prefer to suggest is that the quality of teaching is not parallel to the money a teacher earns. For instance, results of a recent research study at George Washington university illustrates that professors in top rated universities around the world do not stop working because of a lack in payment. Furthermore, as a professor plays a crucial role in science development as much he/she must have luxurious life. Thus, when a professor works better than his/her colleagues, the financial manager must be able to send money to the person's account as a gifts not as a normal payment.
To sum up, I firmly believe that increase of the salary in every business most be related to the efficiency of the employee for two main reasons. first, a huge diverese among salaries of people in the same condition is not fair. What is more, earnings of a tutors of a university is not depended to thier work quality.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, thus, well, for instance, as well as, to sum up, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1644.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73775216138 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68114696142 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530259365994 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4132924362 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.428571429 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7857142857 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64285714286 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175305899349 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594214046417 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416151175377 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105109223115 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0234020291973 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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