TPO-29 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Throughout history, the issue of education has become one of the most important concept that has attracted lots of attention. The way that education has influenced on people’s lives seriously depends on the amount of quality and its capability to improve living. As long as this issue has become an important matter, one should take into account the influential factors to develop it which is teachers and professors who have direct effect on education improvement. One of the most controversial debate coming up is whether the education quality is depended on professors’ income or not. As a matter of fact I believe it would definitely plays an important role however I contend that to investigate this matter, one should consider all factors. In the subsequent paragraphs, I explore my double-side point of view about this issue.

First off, because of the hectic lifestyle that we face in modern lifestyle, people have to work long hours in order to make living with the least amount of income which is the result of proliferation of job position and the excess number of qualified and educated people in society. More salary makes people reach to the normal standard for living. Teachers and professors also have this problem and they have to work hard. As teaching is a mental activity and needs lots of energy and concentration, having a busy mind would readily distract them from focusing on materials. Never do they have an efficient class. Thus, the rate of student’s development declines and they no more learn effectively. For instance, a teacher who always think about paying bills and how to find other ways to make more money would not be able to improve the education and concerns about find a helpful solution to improve his condition.

On the other hand, as I mentioned before copious number of factors are involved in order to improve education. Although the teacher are well-paid, the educational circumstances would be another concern. By advance in technology, the level of education quality is measured by how universities can go beyond today’s technology. By that I mean how students can exert technology to find and discover new field of research and study. Not only does the presence of more equipment play role in the advance of science, but also access to more materials and libraries is influential. If student suffer from the lack of facilities, no matter how much professors effect on education, student would not be able to pursue the science and open new doors of knowledge. Take my university as an example. Our teachers have decent income and try their best to convey their knowledge to their students. But whenever they have a good plan in their minds, they have lots of difficulties to provide required facilities.

To put it briefly, contemplating all factors, one soon realizes that the education will not be improved unless the professors and instructors are paid enough to have a convincing life and some requirements for developing science are provided. Thus, university policy should consider both as equal and try to increase the income of teachers with having an eye to university equipment.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 649, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'play'
Suggestion: play
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Line 5, column 642, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...m the lack of facilities, no matter how much professors effect on education, student...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, however, if, so, thus, well, for instance, i mean, as a matter of fact, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 8.0752688172 322% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2647.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 521.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08061420345 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89167685133 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516314779271 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 844.2 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.7710330251 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.291666667 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7083333333 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.085667820437 0.236089414692 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0269890466681 0.076458572812 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0349188552039 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0609012241823 0.150856017488 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252041046208 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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