TPO 29 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement To improve the quality of education universities should spend money on salaries university professors Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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TPO-29 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

High-quality education was always a significant concern. According to this important issue, some people believe that increasing the salary of professors has a remarkable impact on this issue. Personally, I agree with this group. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, by enhancing their salary, professors can concentrate more on their careers. To explain more, nowadays, economical problems are a considerable matter and everyone wishes to be able to provide a comfortable life for himself and his family by his income. Therefore, more salary may lead to more concentration on and consideration in the job. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a student, I had a professor who had two different careers to support his life. Thus, he was always tired and in the class, he just taught us very fast and the quality of our learning was not important at all but after two years the university increased his income, so he gave up his second job and paid all his attention to the teaching and his class changed to the most energetic classes in the university. If his salary had not been increased, he would not have altered the class atmosphere.
Secondly, rising professors’ payments not only help them to believe in their social level but also improve their self-confidence, and therefore this can result in high-quality education. To clarify my point, feeling occupying in a prestigious career can cause the professor to feel more positive, productive, and self-confident, so they will try to achieve prosperity and this means that they continue to improve education quality. For instance, one of my friends is a lecturer at the university. Since he was not satisfied with his job and income, he was trying to find another job opportunity for himself but after two years and increasing his salary, he felt convinced with his job, so he did his best for the position and now he is one of the most well-known lecturers in that university.
In conclusion, I believe that increasing professors’ payment may develop the quality of education. This is because they can come across their living expenses with the salary and therefore pay more attention to what they do and of course they feel a higher level in the society, so they will try more to achieve success in their job.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 119, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...eir careers. To explain more, nowadays, economical problems are a considerable matter and ...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, of course, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1961.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89027431421 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9217803039 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506234413965 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 87.3950581771 48.9658058833 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.352941176 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5882352941 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41176470588 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102518617762 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0414305602393 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0234887005731 0.0737576698707 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0707895509508 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.015334784092 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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