TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
job is one of the most important part of anybody's life. Everybody has some vital reasons to do a job; such as making money for living, do job as hobby or entertainment, or something else. some people think it is better to work all weekdays, while some other like me like to work only a part of weekdays like three or four days. The following reasons will discuss my point of view in details.
first of all, in this condition I have the best chance to make the best work-life balance. I have a family who we love to spend a lot of time with each other. Whenever we are with each other doing even ordinary homework, we feel it is the best time of our life. my wife and my 8 years old girl love to spend time with me while I try to make a delicious breakfast for them. Actually, the Saturday’s pancake breakfast in our house seems to be the most memorable gathering in every week. my daughter asked me she wishes that I pick her up from school cause in the way of home we make the funniest conversation that we can have. these beautiful times that we experienced with each other can’t repeat anymore and we think they are the most valuable things that we have. If I have the chance to stay home one or two days more in home, how much more sparkling memory we will have with us.
Second, working two or three more hours in a working day have some advantage for project and it will lead to project done sooner. my brother works in a computer company which give some customer services online and for 24/7. he explained to me that they work in long shift that take about 12 hours in a working day; however, when he started this work, he felt some how boring for the first time but after a while he used to that and he is completely consent and happy with his job circumstance. he says that his co-workers and he not only don't get tired but also, they are happy to give some help in some times that their customers are overwhelmed at the hours out of the working hours. he enthusiastically speaks about these kinds of memories. I think this filling motivate person to do his job more efficiently.
In conclusion, I totally agree with this propose that working in long days and having one or two more days off make a better work-life balance. this strategy provides several advantages like working with more focus and passionately in the working days, and have a good and long weekend that give you the best chance to do everything that you enjoy. it seems that each job that has this potential that schedule long weekends for staff will be accepted by a lot of worker.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, second, so, thus, while, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2106.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.3875 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41229489629 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477083333333 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3319197614 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.285714286 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8571428571 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303004476551 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887888484501 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702564923555 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191693365247 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0810788292388 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.48 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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