TPO-32 - Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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TPO-32 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The influence of young people on the future of society is a very significant subject. The society and its opportunities belongs to the young people so role of them on the future of this union is not ignorable. Some people state that young members have no effective role on making decisions for the future of society as an integrated union. personally, I agree with these people according to several important reasons.

My main reason is that, young people approximately have no official position in the administrative organizations of the society. The senior people that control the designation and installation of people on important and effective positions, think that young people are not experienced and reliable enough. For instance, one year ago a 25 year old man was installed as the technology minister. Most of the senate representatives signed a letter that this person is not appropriate for that role. As a result the president was compelled to replace him by an elder person.

Second, the younger members of the society concentrate more on own efforts for having a prosperous future for themself. these group of society thinks that solving problems of the society in the future is much harder than settling their own difficulties so they are not eager to participate in the position that could be influential for integrity of the society.

In sum, I confirm the majority of people who argues that young members of society don't make any important decision for future of society. Not only young people don't have any special position in important but also they don't have any motivation to be more influential for whole people rather than for their own. personally, I think that the role of this important group should be heightened and bolder for being a thriving union.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...erson is not appropriate for that role. As a result the president was compelled to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, for instance, i think, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1493.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 297.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02693602694 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84974222235 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 212.727598566 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484848484848 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 480.6 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9471505426 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.642857143 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2142857143 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35714285714 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229027874335 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0961358979521 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0680350383137 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15377304112 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0723287568605 0.0645574589148 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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