TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.U

Not surprisingly, education has long been as the cornerstone of every human society. Due to different development in technology, the educational process and didactic environment have undergone excessive changes which have provoked a controversial issue. It has been argued that students' intervention in social networks or online games have a negative impact on their learning process. While I do not tend to refute such a view, I believe it can not be generalized to all cases.
The first point to support such a view is that the advent of the internet has paved the ways for a wide range of facilities in learning materials. Knowledge means obtaining information. In the past, there were limited ways for acquiring knowledge such as traditional libraries or published textbooks which most of them were not up-to-date. However, through smartphones, one can always access to endless information or abundant resources in just a few minutes. In fact, more online resource, e-book, or e-library help students to share required references more easily and quickly through social networks. Therefore, the methods of obtaining information have facilitated.

Moreover, through advances in social networks or cell phones, students can acquire different skills which are likely to be more accordant to the contemporary environment. In the past, due to the limitation in geographical distances, it was less significant to have a high level of social skill, and in fact, most children pursued their father's career. Not surprisingly, the job labor drastically changed. In today's environment, most employers are seeking for those applicants who not only are well-educated but also have a great command of different skills to deal with computer-based tasks or a high level of communicating. Furthermore, it should be noted that there are more strategic-based games which allow young generation to develop their critical thinking or organize their mindsets through plays. Hence, these all abilities seem essential for students to be prepared for their future career.

Despite these advantages, technology, every now and then, has been criticized for consuming children's time. Needless to say, whether the advent of a novelty can be beneficial is directly referred to people's use. If students have involved in computer games or social networks most of the time, there is a little doubt that they might not meet their teachers' requirements. Meanwhile, over-dependence on these kinds of networks might make them indifferent to their surroundings or primary responsibilities. However, some monitored treatments from parents might be regarded as a remedy for these kinds of problems.

From what have been discussed, the ubiquity of the internet and other communication devices have different redeeming features. As it was mentioned, not only can it be known as a notable source of information but also the requirements in today's world has made children be involved in these advances.

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Average: 9.2 (4 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 279, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...oversial issue. It has been argued that students intervention in social networks or onli...
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Line 6, column 39, Rule ID: EVERY_NOW_AND_THEN[1]
Message: Use simply 'now and then'.
Suggestion: now and then
... Despite these advantages, technology, every now and then, has been criticized for consuming chil...
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Line 6, column 200, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
...n be beneficial is directly referred to peoples use. If students have involved in compu...
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Line 8, column 196, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y can it be known as a notable source of information but also the requirements in...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'well', 'while', 'in fact', 'such as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.230019493177 0.229887763892 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.163742690058 0.158761421928 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.111111111111 0.0866891130778 128% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0643274853801 0.046263068375 139% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0350877192982 0.0685040099705 51% => OK
Prepositions: 0.111111111111 0.118717715034 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0604288499025 0.0351676179071 172% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.14440408059 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0311890838207 0.0309702414327 101% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0799220272904 0.0887237588012 90% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0175438596491 0.0209618222197 84% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0116959064327 0.0139019557991 84% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2971.0 2387.08602151 124% => OK
No of words: 461.0 408.028673835 113% => OK
Chars per words: 6.44468546638 5.86048508987 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.399132321041 0.338922669872 118% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.334056399132 0.251872472559 133% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.268980477223 0.174417080927 154% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.180043383948 0.112833075102 160% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14440408059 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533622559653 0.524397521467 102% => OK
Word variations: 62.9127187192 59.2087087015 106% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0434782609 20.5533526081 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2914816835 48.84282405 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.173913043 120.699889404 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0434782609 20.5533526081 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.652173913043 0.644075263715 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 53.4491181741 45.7405998639 117% => OK
Elegance: 1.52592592593 1.45489161554 105% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198872302154 0.300154397459 66% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.070879246982 0.103427244359 69% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0490300939112 0.0752933317313 65% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.448671698734 0.497263757937 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.121199940881 0.151897553556 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0706757028257 0.114077575197 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493312170975 0.0781384742642 63% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.304873903527 0.336927656856 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0475846147502 0.067059652881 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135726784537 0.210909579961 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0171439743183 0.0618886996521 28% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8870967742 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.86379928315 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.91756272401 163% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 2.4623655914 284% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.75985663082 254% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.6433691756 161% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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