TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.U

There is no doubt that the genetic characterization plays an important role in the influence of the human personality and features. However, as far as I concern, the good and power environment has the dominant effective role. Someone can consciously weigh the pros and cons of Each side, the explanation is going to be as follows.

First of all, there is a natural evidence that all the new babies born have the ability to learn and acquire skills faster than any older children. Hence, I think that they are genetically equivalent at this side, and it is the nature of humanity. For example, there is a child has the ability to speak at very early age and that's because his parents used to take to On the contrary, the lonely child or less communication child does not have the ability to speak at early age. So, I think the community and environment have a massive impact in the development of child.

Then, the relation inside the home is the most significant consideration. you should put in your mind that the way of dealing with the kid influence a lot of his mind. For example, my parents were used to encourage me and my brother to participating in In addition to that, they give us the chance to plan and organize and take important decisions about our carrier or the school we prefer. All of that makes us self confidence and Now I become the leader of Student's Union Organization and my brother become the leader of his football team.

To sum up, due to the excellent methods, all bulk should put in mind that the surrounding environment, the home and the good and encourage treatment of the child will enhance his personality formation, and for certain he will become a leader and effective person in The society.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, so, then, for example, i think, in addition, no doubt, first of all, on the contrary, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1428.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65146579805 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7388345819 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543973941368 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.2632836293 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.0 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5833333333 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1666666667 5.45110844103 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0378086893595 0.236089414692 16% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0139830659421 0.076458572812 18% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0161901915164 0.0737576698707 22% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0174624525456 0.150856017488 12% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0181906718713 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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