TPO 35- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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TPO 35- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In fact, the thought of whether renowned people need more privacy has turned into a controversial issue during recent years as far as a hundreds of researches has been done about the mentioned statement. Some people if were asked would agree with the fact that famous people including athletes and actors should have personal private situation, others have negative attitude toward this point of view. As far as my memory helps, I am in agreement with the letter group. Undeniably, celebrated people as well as ordinary people need time to be alone in order to do some personal activities; besides, peace is counted as significant factor that all people are trying to achieve it. Moreover, privacy can bring people triumph; hence, I extremely assert the claim.

Actually, as mentioned above, privacy and prosperity are effect each other in a loop; in other words, the privacy contribute people to be more successful; however, the success that causes people to fame definitely declines the amount of privacy. Therefore, another factor should be intent to decrease the second part of loop. This attribute can be planned by policy makers. For instance, a low can be enacted to limit the interaction of people and celebrities.

Indeed, although people like to be at the center of attentions, they prefer to be in a secret place in order to enjoy their lives; furthermore, being in a crowded place for a long time bothers people; actually, people sometimes want to be in solitary to feel peacefulness.

A part from the reasons given above, one cannot neglect the fact that people's attention is counted as an effective issue that increase amount of popularity; hence, to be renowned people have to accept the fact that they should share more time with others.

All in all, it is hard to ignore the fact that a famous people not only experience good time when is spent with her or his favorer but some intolerable situation must be stood. In conclusion, both people and government should let entertainers and athletes to feel more relax and intimate with society. Absolutely, they need time to allocate it to their personal activities. Generally, have less privacy would put the mental health in danger.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: a hundred
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Suggestion: a hundred; hundreds
...ial issue during recent years as far as a hundreds of researches has been done about the m...
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Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
...tement. Some people if were asked would agree with the fact that famous people including athletes and ac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, as well as, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1852.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03260869565 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65415414091 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557065217391 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.0732984459 48.9658058833 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.466666667 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5333333333 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6666666667 5.45110844103 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133601556181 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0508405481489 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466907144806 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0826986431295 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0501732880189 0.0645574589148 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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