TPO-35 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, having privacy is one of the central needs of human beings which should be fulfilled to improve the quality of life. Some well-known people such as athletes have a great struggle with this matter in their lives. Many people hold the opinion that whether they need more privacy in their lives like others or not. I agree with this perspective. The reasons to support my viewpoint is elaborated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, they need to have their own personal life and feel free in the public. To be more specific, everyone have been doing various activities such as going park with their family, going shopping and so on along with their occupation. Therefore, if individual have not privacy they can not do some of these activities, because they will be bother by others. For instance, many people might ask them to take a picture. Imagine a famous singer who want to go park with his family. How he can use his time favorably in this place if many people bother him and his family. Therefore, in most of the cases these kinds of people deprive their families member to have memorable time in local parks. As a result, individuals must respect both ordinary and well-known people life.
Moreover, having privacy in their life, they can concentrate on their professional jobs to make more enjoyable moments for their fans. To put it in other words, every person need to allocate a great deal of time to his/ her career and attempt to improve it. If people engage in various unrelated issues rather than their jobs, they might have face numerous problems to keep themselves in high-level. An example can shed some light on this. Imagine a famous athlete who is a soccer player. This person needs to have relieve mind and concentration to perform well in every match. If he/ she has occupied his mind with some fake news which have been published by some whether websites or people, he will allocate a great deal of time to make an announcement to aware the public and his/ her fans about this new. Therefore, his/ her performance will be affected.
To wrap it up, I strongly believe that famous people like others need to have right to have their privacy. Not only can they do other activities in public with open mind, but also they can have better performance in their profession.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, for instance, such as, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1913.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73514851485 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43832235166 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517326732673 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.0530699028 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.1739130435 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5652173913 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82608695652 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0843582145577 0.236089414692 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0331276636753 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0367773646767 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.061326548359 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278764481644 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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