TPO 36- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children(five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
most people agree that education plays an increasingly important role in the development of society in today's world. In my opinion, I believe that governments should spend much more money on the education of youngsters than on the education of universities. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I explore in the following essay.
To begin with, spending on a young people education is more efficient than university education. To be more specific, when spending great amounts of money are invested in learning of kids, their mental abilities will be developed considerably, which enables to affects the economic status of the society positively. In today's world, a great number of young student’s education are supported by most international companies. For example, Microsoft has started an event as part of the ‘Hour Code’ in my country in various cities, which are aimed at making children love the software. children between the ages of 5-12 are accepted to these courses. this is because technological advancements have a profound impact on our lives and will need amounts of workers in these fields in the foreseeable future. In this situation, the profit of companies will increase, and thus the states will have much more revenue. As a result, children's education plays an important role in society's welfare.
Furthermore, by spending money on kids' education, their academic success will increase in the universities, which helps them to play a productive role in their society shortly. In other words, it is well-known fact that a student who is well-primary-educated is more academic success than others. my personal experience is a compelling example of this. my cousin of the same age was in public school and her school has a comparatively worse quality of education than other private schools. therefore, she took the exam many times to study at the university but failed every time she applied. If my cousin studying at a better school, she would have studied at university, and thus it would be more beneficial to society. Consequently, the government spending more money on child education is very important for the academic success of the child.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that investing money in educating youngster is more beneficial for the country. Not only improve their mental ability but also improve their academic success. therefore, governments should spend much more money on children's education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2071.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26972010178 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00939185591 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519083969466 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0560966407 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.619047619 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.71428571429 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331083216728 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101839319744 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0959898525888 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225866620703 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271425434724 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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