TPO-41 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Teaching is very interesting and valuable job. Teaching is also very hard job specially in kindergarten and elementary schools. Because, managing young children and teaching them need lots of energy. The question of variation in teacher's position in society has been a topic of controversy among educational system's manager. Different responses can be given to this question based on different societies. In my opinion, teacher were more appreciated in the past that they were nowadays. I have two main reasons for holding this opinion which I am going to mention in the reminder of this essay.
The first reason coming to mind for supporting this idea is associated with economy. Unfortunatly, one of the main factors that creates appreciation and value for different people is economy level. Teachers don't earn as much as other people in different countries. It is really embrassing. Because, teachers nurture engineers and doctors and etc. But unfortunatly, engineer's salary is much higher than teachers. For instance, in my country, Iran, teachers are in the bottom of most paid job's list. The level of economy has decreased value of teacher in the society.
Their number is the second reason that advocate my idea. Number of teachers increases in the society each year. Because most people are going to be a teacher for its job security and also teachers have lower hours of working than other jobs. The number of teachers in the past was really lower that today. However, the population increased and the society needs more teachers but I thinks that having lower number of teachers with high quality is better than having many teachers with low quality. Let's use an example for supporting my idea. Today, in my country number of teachers is twice as it was in 20 years ago but the population is not twice as it was in that time.
In conclusion, Teachers were more appreciated and valued in the past than they were nowadays. I think that two reasons that cause this problem is associated with economy and their number. I hope that governments will control these problems and teachers will get their position back in the future.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, so, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1779.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96927374302 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6150577813 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494413407821 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.7024840609 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.16 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.32 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233350883021 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699779253723 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0890455730021 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153691487329 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426739862713 0.0645574589148 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.95 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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