TPO-43 - Independent Writing Task Imagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting. The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion, which of the following is the best thing to do?-Interrupt and correct the mistake right away-Wa

Everyone loves to hear only a good thing about them mostly if they are in a large group of member or in a crowd. It is a human nature willing to listen only positives comments and praises of them. I feel this way because of two reason which I will explore in the following essay.

First, the present era is going to those directions where people do not want to listen negative comment they believe on success only received with out doing any mistakes but they do not understand mistakes is the first step moving toward the success. I have my own experience Ist in a humanitarian aid related project, we had a team which works on needy people and our motto was help to overcome from the post traumatic period from tsumani. Our group in-charge gave us a task about to collect The data from the field and make a chart about the conditions, their needs and mental condition. All did fabulous work and came to present each of us experience and suggest the project future working model,During the presentation my co worker provide the false information to the head of the team member but I do not say anything about the reliability of the data in the meeting. After the meeting was over I came to her and talk about her mis-edit about The data and that time she thanks me about not telling to the groups. Because of the incident I realize that people do not want to listen their mistakes in group, I was try to correct her in-front of all member may be she thinks I Am trying to her showing wrong with group.I was try to correct her in-front of all member may be she thinks I am trying to her showing wrong with group.I was try to correct her in-front of all member may be she thinks I am trying to her showing wrong with group.

Second, mistakes can happen even from the higher personnel and that is a normal thing and it does not show those people are less intelligent or bad. People have to understand and have a guts to accept it. I have a very bad experience with trying to When I was a University student , my friend was giving her presentation about the climate change and their coping mechanism process. During her presentation, she gave a false statement about people are mitigating the effect of climate change in poor Countries which is not possible and they only try to adapt it which I correct in her presentation but my friendship with her turn into the cold relationship and she thinks that I try to make her feel inferior in front of the class.

In conclusion, no one like to listen their mistakes in front of the mass, they do not have that much courage to accept it and learn from it. So, it will be always better to tell their mistakes separately but not in group.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 143, Rule ID: WITH_OUT[1]
Message: This word is usually written together. Did you mean 'without'?
Suggestion: without
...t they believe on success only received with out doing any mistakes but they do not unde...
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Line 3, column 699, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , During
...suggest the project future working model,During the presentation my co worker provide t...
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Line 3, column 1160, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
...y to correct her in-front of all member may be she thinks I Am trying to her showing w...
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Line 3, column 1222, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
... trying to her showing wrong with group.I was try to correct her in-front of all ...
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Line 3, column 1270, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
...y to correct her in-front of all member may be she thinks I am trying to her showing w...
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Line 3, column 1332, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
... trying to her showing wrong with group.I was try to correct her in-front of all ...
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Line 3, column 1380, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
...y to correct her in-front of all member may be she thinks I am trying to her showing w...
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Line 5, column 281, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...rying to When I was a University student , my friend was giving her presentation a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, i feel, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2191.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40845070423 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42240010939 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442655935614 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 681.3 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 102.232849689 48.9658058833 209% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 146.066666667 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.1333333333 20.6045352989 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0835249931245 0.236089414692 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0315346061502 0.076458572812 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0222401000643 0.0737576698707 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0540635594424 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0120688587501 0.0645574589148 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.9 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.89 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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