TPO 44 Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things

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TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task

Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Decent upbringing of children has been always the ultimate objective of all psychologists and sociologists since there are numerous concealed and conspicuous factors and elements, which can affect the health, behavior, and other aspects of the young. Finding the best way to spend kids free time is always a matter of great controversy. Some are of the opinion that children should cooperate with each other for doing their schoolworks, while others belive that participating in games and sport programs would be more beneficial for them. I-for One- subscribe to the latter idea on the ground that young people can learn life lessons from games, it helps them to be familiar with teamwork, and it recharges their batteries for their studies.
To beging with, life is replete with ups and downs, so are games. Sports are valuable experiences for children to learn about the different hardships and joyfullness of real life. For example, they will learn how to handle a situation after a defeat and make the most of it to reach a permanent success. Likewise, they will acquire this knoweldge that victories are ephemeral too and they should always strive to obtain success.
Secondly, in today's world, with its demanding jobs and expertises, teamwork is an essential ability to succeed. The youngs can learn the valueable ability of teamwork by attending with their friends in games and sports. They will know how get assistance from thier teamates when needed. Also, they would know that how much it is important to help their friends in the crucail moments of life and how helping them benefits themselves too. Moreover, in this way kids will gain good sport spirit which is a great moral asset.
The last but not the least reason which reinforces the preceding assertation that children should spend their leisure time on the activities such as games rather than schoolwork is that all study and no play makes Jack a doll boy. It is incontrovertibly axiomatic that recreation is indispensible for children as far as their motivation for study is concerned. According to the latest statistics kids who participate well enough in the entertainment activities have better scores in school rather than their peers. Furthermore, forcing children to doing school work even in their free time will eventually deteriorate their incentives and makes them to hate studying.
All in all, taken into account what was already mentioned, I do believe that the best way to use the children's pastime is to play games and perform sports rather than doing their homeworks with their friends. Because they can gain life experiences through games, they learn teamwork, and they can recharge their batteries for their study.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, likewise, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2267.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10585585586 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65591158858 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540540540541 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 659.7 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0563386341 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.315789474 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3684210526 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42105263158 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234452534807 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.06807659227 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683098788981 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128709814629 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0690238141666 0.0645574589148 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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