TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

Nowadays people are more busy because they face to many problems and many duties and to struggle with these issues take much of their times. As a result, they spend fewer time with their chidren. Major of people prefer to play with their children during this time, but others believe this time should be spended for helping them in schoolworks. In my point of view parents should fulfill both playing with them, and helping them in their school assignments.

To begin with, children need attention and kindness treatment if this requirement does not payed completely, it can cause some negative effect on their psychological behaviour. These children might lose theit incentive to study more levels and leave schools sooner and contribute in career that has no lucid future for them. As an example a group of these student might become thief or illegal person that stop doing societies' rules. These kind of person in future become parent and do not pay attention to suitable method for rising their children and this cause also more problem for such society and this problem should be mentioned and solved by authorities.

Helping children in their schools courses deserve to be noticed. Chidren learn things easier and deeper from their parent since they are more comfortable with their parents. Few parents take private instructor for their children to help them more in school assignment. parents also can buy some sientific shows for their children to help them more in their leasons and increase their knowlendge in different domains. If parents help efficiently, students will prosper more in future.

To sum up, both playing with children, and helping them in learning schools courses are important and need to be noticed.

Votes
Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 92, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'pay'
Suggestion: pay
... treatment if this requirement does not payed completely, it can cause some negative ...
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Line 3, column 351, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this student' or 'these students'?
Suggestion: this student; these students
...ture for them. As an example a group of these student might become thief or illegal person th...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 435, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...person that stop doing societies rules. These kind of person in future become parent and d...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 270, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Parents
...to help them more in school assignment. parents also can buy some sientific shows for t...
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Line 5, column 474, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...efficiently, students will prosper more in future. To sum up, both playing with childr...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, kind of, as a result, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1454.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 285.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10175438596 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38708951824 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554385964912 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 420.3 618.680645161 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3566929112 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.857142857 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3571428571 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64285714286 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199573501569 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.083714414538 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652961103792 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12544963553 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.075438865637 0.0645574589148 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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