TPO-44
Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
In this progressive and sophisticated world, there are variety of methods for children to spend their time when parents do not have leisure time to company with them such as playing computer games or sports. A controversial question, which is often raised in this regard is that children have better to do things that completely related to their schoolwork. While some people are inclined towards this viewpoint that children are capable of spending their time on playing games or exercising, others, on the other hand, are against this point of view. As far as I concerned, I am the opinion of that children are necessary to do things that is correlated with their schoolwork. In the following paragraph, I will delve into some reasons and examples justifying my point of view.
The first noteworthy reason comes to my mind is that children are anticipated to learn the knowledge or absorb the information by themselves, and doing things together which are related to their schoolwork assists their children can get the knowledge quickly. For children, it is hard for them to distinguish the considerable information from getting correct ones. As a result, children possibly make mistakes, misunderstanding, or misinterpreting when they research by themselves. Therefore, parents are the best assistant who can provide their accumulated knowledge prevent the children from being wrong. Take one of my experience, when I was five years old, my teacher requested us to research the history of my country, however, I got a not corresponding material, but my parents found it and suggested me to revise the material.
Another exquisite point to be mentioned is that parents are care about their children's learning behaviors, and doing things with their children related to schoolwork provide an opportunity for parents to know their children's learning behaviors. Take one of my friends' experience as an example. When he was little, he had difficult to do math problems. Consequently, his parents put a lot of effort on him to teach him how to solve the problems. Finally, he was able to solve every problems by himself because his parents spend most of their free time to teach him.
To summarize, from what has been discussed above, it is crystal clear that parents have to spend their time with their children to complete things that are related to schoolwork. The first reason behind this is helping children to get correct learning materials. Moreover, this way offers parents understand their children's learning behaviors.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2123.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16545012165 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90664555689 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496350364964 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.3973725309 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.944444444 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61111111111 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338397579301 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10836326669 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0900806105514 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218867225361 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0852695457568 0.0645574589148 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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