TPO 45- In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives

It is a matter of fact that children always rely on their parents in any kind of situation and even after growing up the advice of parents plays a vital role in decision making. I personally think that though in the past teenagers relied on their parents for deciding for them, now-a-days they prefers to take their own decision. I feel this way for two reasons that i will like to explore in the essay below.
First of all, if we look back in the past, we might found that most of the young generation opted for some specific occupation considered as established job in that time and chose to study some specific subjects accordingly. It has a great deal of the choice from the parents.For example in my country Bangladesh,once upon a time all parents wanted their children to study in medical so most of the peers tried to get admitted at any kind of medical, government or private. But now-a-days young people understands their own liking and choose their subject of study and job accordingly. That is why there are more people majoring in arts, music, dance and any other subjects emerging from the decision of their parents.
Secondly, if we consider one significant decision of anybody's life, " Marriage", it also was decided by the parents in the past. There is a lot of example of arranged marriage in the past There was time, when parents would set marriage of their children for friendship or heredity or property and after being teenager or grown up, the children had to just abide by. It was so common to set marriage between the children at very young age specially in case of girls. But now young people prefer to choose on their own whom to marry and when to marry. The example of girls deciding not to marry at a early age and building a career instead has increased exponentially in the past few decades.
Therefore, it can be averted without doubt that the tendency of depending on parents for making decisions for them is far less in the current young generation than the young generation of the past.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'prefer'
Suggestion: prefer
... for deciding for them, now-a-days they prefers to take their own decision. I feel this...
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Line 1, column 368, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...n. I feel this way for two reasons that i will like to explore in the essay below...
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Message: Did you mean 'would'?
Suggestion: would
... I feel this way for two reasons that i will like to explore in the essay below. Fi...
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Line 2, column 276, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
...eat deal of the choice from the parents.For example in my country Bangladesh,once u...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , once
...nts.For example in my country Bangladesh,once upon a time all parents wanted their ch...
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Line 3, column 607, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ample of girls deciding not to marry at a early age and building a career instead...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, i feel, kind of, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1674.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59679289381 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527777777778 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.989509489 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.769230769 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6923076923 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92307692308 5.45110844103 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351098269294 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126225433335 0.076458572812 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860082747535 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221791028528 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437206679594 0.0645574589148 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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