TPO-46 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and exam

Celebrities have a significant role in peoples' live owing to widespread communication. One noticeable question which raised in this regard is that whether celebrities are more prominent to younger people than they are to older people. While some people firmly believe that celebrities have more effects on juvenile than older people, others hold the opposite perspective. I think that famous people considerably influence younger owing to some notable reasons. The ensuing paragraphs will elaborate on my points of view.
The most eminent reason is that young people access to technology like different application more than old people. Young people spend a lot of time surfing on the internet and communication application like Facebook and Instagram, thus, they would be engaged in famous people news because online pages utilize celebrities striking news for attracting people which usually is successful. On the other hand older people barely even spend their time on the internet so they would not expose to celebrities news as well as juvenile.
Another striking reason which worths some word here is that younger people want to find a role model in their lives and celebrities are candidates to be their role model. Conversely, old people do not require a role model because they experience whatever they want and now they are retired. For example, when I was younger, I really want to find someone to follow him to become prosperous. I considered some celebrities successful because they put all their efforts and time to make their dream. As a result, famous people are more important for young people.
Admittedly, young people consider fashion a remarkable factor in their lives and celebrities are the most fashion in the society. Hence, they juvenile want to look like them to be more fashion. In the opposition, older people are not motivated enough to follow fashion because it is not a meaningful factor for them anymore. A recent survey in this regard has done in Yale University to examine celebrities dressing effects on society. It indicates that over half of the young people want to imitate celebrities clothe and hairstyle but less than a third of older people care about celebrities cloth. Consequently, famous people are more eminent for younger people.
To sum up, taking all the substantial factors into account, we might come to the result that renown people would have more effect on the juveniles rather than old people. I recommend that everyone should consider it is absolutely important that not all the celebrities should be followed and maybe even they are not as qualified as our role model.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, conversely, hence, if, look, may, really, so, third, thus, well, while, for example, i think, as a result, as well as, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2203.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1351981352 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70205502998 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463869463869 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 715.5 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0543684676 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.904761905 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4285714286 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.90476190476 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222617636659 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0854917049155 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589678398083 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142695047642 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0247531271099 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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