TPO 46 Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement The opinions of celebrities such as famous entertainers and athletes are more important to younger people than they are to older people Use specific reasons and examp

With the advent of the social media into our life, now the role and impact of famous and well-known people like celebrities and athletes is more significant than before. Today, most of us are following their life on different media such as Facebook or Instagram, and we are eager to know their opinion about different issues. Personally, I do agree with the statement on the topic and I think the opinions of famous people are more important to youth than older people. I feel this way because of some reasons which I will explain more in the following assay:

First of all, having a famous role model is very important for youth. As young people are not very experienced and they are not mature enough, they are always looking for a person to imitate from her or him and they like to arrange their life in a way to become like them in future. Because famous people further than their fame, are wealthy and successful persons in their professional life.
Moreover, as young could not decide independently, the opinions of famous people are very important for them. For example, when a famous athlete talk about the benefits of education beside the sport, most of the youth become more enthusiastic to achieve more success in their education. However, it is undeniable that, sometimes, some of the famous people may have negative impact on the life of some young like stimulating them to use alcoholic drinks or drugs.

Additionally, as youth have more free time than older, consequently spend more time on social media and therefore, they get more involved with the news of the famous people and as a result they become more affected by the such news. However, the news of celebrities or athletes are not very important for adults and they do not care about their opinions, mainly because they have their own way of thinking that cannot be easily affected by others opinions. For example, the political opinions of a famous singer is not important for an adult and mature person, whoever, it could be important for a young person.

to draw my conclusion, as i mentioned above, the opinions of famous people are more important for young, because as youth are not very experienced and enough mature, they are looking for famous role models like celebrities and as they have more free time to follow the life and news of famous people, their opinions could be easily affected by celebrities or athletes, against the adults who have their own strict opinions and way of thinking.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, i feel, i think, such as, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2060.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81308411215 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50628522523 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.418224299065 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 671.4 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.7308325792 48.9658058833 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.461538462 100.406767564 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.9230769231 20.6045352989 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2307692308 5.45110844103 206% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304844380663 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137383940856 0.076458572812 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0771972353522 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205165391774 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0612652350731 0.0645574589148 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.21 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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