TPO 47: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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TPO 47: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There are many events happening around us in the world which some of them have no effect on our daily life. In this case, I disagree that it is important to know about those events. In the following, I elaborate my point of view.

First, knowing about an event which han no effect on our life may cause stress, and thus, would not be usefull to make aware about it. For example, suppose that thare is a war between two countries accourring very far from us. Many people are killing, and there is a huge famin in those countries. It is not clear which country is right, and they are destroying their rescurces, such as oil wells, minerals, etc. If this event has no effect on our life, awaring about it, just, increase stress in our life. Unfortunately, often, medias have not attention to this point and present some seneries of these awfull situations and tranfer stress to people.

Second, understanding about an event which is happening remote may have cost. For instance, to know about such a situation described in the latter, we may send a reporter to each country. This can be harmful for the reporter due to the war. He/she may be killed and cause an unpleasantness in our country. In addition, showing those kine of reports in our media can take many time from our life and it would be costive.

In short, to conclude and sum up my points, I agree that if an event is accouring around the world and has no effect in our life, it is nor significant to know about it because of causing stress and cost in our country.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 372, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'many times'.
Suggestion: many times
...e kine of reports in our media can take many time from our life and it would be costive. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in short, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1261.0 1977.66487455 64% => OK
No of words: 279.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.51971326165 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42832004126 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530465949821 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 390.6 618.680645161 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9855001426 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0666666667 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46666666667 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 11.8709677419 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146484565225 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543842047197 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579175984393 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118664083565 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0533096573367 0.0645574589148 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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