TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.

There is no doubt that the new world is being so small and linked together by several ways may be economic or political. According to my view I agree that it is important to have a knowledge about the events happening all over the world and I think that they may have indirect role into my life and the explanations are going as follow.

First, I'm Egyptian and I used to live in Egypt. After I have been finished my graduate, I decided to have a job overseas. Finally, after a lot of applying I received an approval form a petroleum company at Saudi Arabia and worked there around three months.I was very disappointed because I had not received my salary and my workmates laughed at me and said that it is the recent situation because of the economic decline in the country and claimed that I'm not a good listener to the news. If I were known, I would choose another country.

In addition to that point, I'm a biochemist and doctoral researcher. when I was supposed to complete buying the chemicals required for my research, I surprised when the chemical company send the bill, the price of the chemicals was increased triply from the last time I bought and it argued that the increasing was related to the recent value of dollar. If I were known that the dollar increased triply, I would bought more quantity of chemicals.

Lastly, I think that the world events have a pleasant effect into my life. For example, the world cup is the most important football championship that happen every four years. I have watched the last championship with my all family members. We used to meet at my grandfather house and wear the T-shirts of our national team and holds the flags of our country. This event made me very happy and Cheerful because I always busy and have no time to meet my family, so; it was a good chance to see them and supported our national team together.

Votes
Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, lastly, may, so, for example, i think, in addition, no doubt

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1534.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52507374631 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53396622915 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53982300885 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 92.8404655353 48.9658058833 190% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.571428571 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2142857143 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.094852301044 0.236089414692 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0343062999179 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550888460362 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0631052042195 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0642742672652 0.0645574589148 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.29 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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