TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.

Following news is one of the subjects that people are interested in. Each people follow different types of news and event all around the world according to the interests. The question of how necessairly is that has been a topic of controversy among different people. In my opinion, it is important that people know about events happening around the world. I have two reasons for holding this idea which I will mention in the reminder if this essay.
The first reason coming to mind for supporting mentioned idea is associated with people's future. People can predict different aspects of their future life based on current news, Specially political news. Different countries affect each other in different ways and world is like a chain which each member has an effect on other members directly or indirectly. If people follow the current events around the world, they will be able to predict their's country future. This helps them to find the right place to invest their money in the future although it doesn't necessairly affect their country directly. For instance, I followed the news about negotiation between United States and North Korea because I know that it has a indirect effects on world economy and peace and also my country.
Being up to date is another reason advocating my idea about this topic. People always have different topics to talk with each other in their gathering. It is very important to have enough idea in different topics which is achieved by following news and events all around the world. Following events gives people different ideas for talking in their gathering. Let's use an example to support this idea. We were talking about different political topics in family gathering with each other last summer. My cousin is not interested in political news and he wasn't aware of updated news. Hence, he was compeletly quite during our discussion and it was a shame for him.
In conclusion, people should follow news and event all around the world because they can predict their future and they get an idea for talking in family or friend gatherings.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, so, as for, for instance, in conclusion, talking about, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1729.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92592592593 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4314432544 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492877492877 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 535.5 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.1725745432 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.45 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.55 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173900901368 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0664770877977 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726823319576 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133305824938 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309414834018 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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