TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

By and large, it is established beyond doubt that being organize ply a prominent role in all individual’s success. Regarding this issue, some people are inclined toward the idea that without having plan and being organized, it is not possible live in this modern era and very complex life. However some others look at this concept through a different lens and take the opposed viewpoint. From my vantage point, the former belief is true. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into two important reasons.

The first focal point that prompts me to hold this idea is that, having the ability to plan and organize provides concentration and it is key of breakthrough in any case in life. For example, last term I had two difficult research paper with very strict professors. One of was about chemistry and the other one was about environmental hazards. What I did was at the first week of the term I plan to allocate 2 hours a day to search for each paper. Therefore, I obligate myself to this plan no matter what. For chemistry paper, I had worked in laboratory and for the other one surface the internet. During the term, I was concentrated but I saw my friends that had stress and confused because they did not have any plan to do their research. At the end of the term, I was the only student that completed my papers with high grades.

Another equally salient point in corroborating my stance in this subject is that, nowadays everything is organize, from government departments through markets. If you want to have a relax and happy life in a mega city, you should adopt yourself with many orders. For instance, public transportations are schedule and if you do not want be late for school, not only you should being aware of bus schedule, but also consider traffic, because it is one of the big problem in most mega cities. As you can see, in this modern era, everything is connect to each other and without having plan and organize, it is not possible to have a decent life.

In conclusion, all aforementioned reasons, having the ability to plan and organize is essential for this modern and very complex life because not does they provide concentration which is the key of success, but also everything is connect to each other and you cannot do something without a plan because of that.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, regarding, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, by and large, in any case

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1909.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71358024691 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69841186845 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501234567901 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.9982638653 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.055555556 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.22222222222 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281375210777 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807665127797 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0772955157469 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187580016047 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0717743105713 0.0645574589148 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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