TPO 48 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Because modern life is very complex it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize

Nowadays, we are living in a very dynamic world and planing and organization are considered one of the most important aspects in our lives. People can get their tasks done quickly through a good plan and time managment. I am sure that some people believe that the ability to plan and organize is very critical in the modren life would be a great idea, while other would disagree. However, when it comes to me I totally agree that we have to obtain the ability of planning to cope with the dynamic world. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will demonstrate in the following essay.

To begin with, organized people can get their task done on time quickly. Recently, many people are struggling with many issues and they have to be good planner to overcome a lot of obstacles. For instance, my parents are so busy all day long and they are working a full time jobs. Last week, my father was way for a business trip and my mother had to manage all the tasks alone. In fact, my mother is very organized pesron and she always has her own notes on her smart phone. As a result, she has a good reminder before and event. Furthermore, my mom had her own plan for the whole week. First, she would able to finish her work on time and gets back home to take care of me. In addition, she organized our weekend in manner to have fun and finish the shopping in the same day. Moreother, she helped me to finish my assignment for the chemistry class. Besides, she would able to pick my father up from the airport. In fact, I can tell that she was so organized and she had a good plan. On the other hand, if she did not has the ability to mange her time, she would not be able to het their work done on time. As you can see, any person who has a good talent to plan and organize his life, he can enjoy every single moment in this complex life.

In addition, the ability to plan and organize helps students to relieve their stress. Recently, many students are struggling with many assignments and exams and they have to smart enough to mange their time in a professional way. For example, my brother is a student at medical school, which provides him with many classes each semester. In fact, my brother is intelligent student. Besides, he has his own plan for the whole year. So, he feels relaxed and get away from any stress. Furthermore, he attended many lectures everyday. Furthermore, because he is a very organized person, he takes notes after each class and save it for later. As a result, he can remind himself with many subjects and topics before the exam. Consequently, he graduated with high scores in the first year. Nevertheless, my sister is not organized and she always lets everything for the last minute. So, she always feels frustrated and she could not focus during the class. In addition, she could not enjoy his life with her friends.

In conclusion, I strongly agree that people has to have their plans and they have to organize their lives. This is because have a good plan will help them to get their work done on time, and bacause they have to get rid from any stress.

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Average: 7 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...stacles. For instance, my parents are so busy all day long and they are working a...
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...usy all day long and they are working a full time jobs. Last week, my father was way for ...
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...n addition, she organized our weekend in manner to have fun and finish the shoppi...
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Line 3, column 1024, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...plan. On the other hand, if she did not has the ability to mange her time, she woul...
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Line 5, column 208, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a professional way" with adverb for "professional"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ave to smart enough to mange their time in a professional way. For example, my brother is a student a...
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
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... Furthermore, he attended many lectures everyday. Furthermore, because he is a very orga...
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...re, he attended many lectures everyday. Furthermore, because he is a very organized person,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, so, while, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 81.0 43.0788530466 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2519.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 570.0 407.700716846 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.41929824561 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88617158649 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33155254562 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.435087719298 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 800.1 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 28.0 9.59856630824 292% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.6003584229 165% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.34906496 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.0882352941 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7647058824 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.02941176471 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187183051752 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0525301971477 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042387026055 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140891436903 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384580546899 0.0645574589148 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.06 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.81 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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