TPO 48 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Because modern life is very complex it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize

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TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

One of the major preoccupations of all parents is their children future. It is a great struggle for them to assist their kids to be more disciplined and have real objective for their coming years. However, the question is whether the young need to be more organized and have distinct programs for themselves than the kids in the past did. I- for one- subscribe to the idea that hectic life of today and demanding careers require children to be more organized and have goals on the ground that they can decide better, it would save their time, and they would be less stressed.
First and foremost, life is like a journey in a tortuous way, which bifurcates in many steps and there would be need to make important decisions which will affect the whole life person. Being disciplined in all aspects and works that children do will culminates in having a well-organized mind. Therefore, they would be able to make proper decisions in difficult situations, which eventually will bring them immense emotional satisfaction and maximum enjoyment from their life.
Secondly, time is the most precious gift of life, so no one wants to waste it. Being organized and having clear aims, juveniles can utilize their time as effectively as their can. for example, if a child want to do his or her schoolwork but they don't have any timing and program for their work, they might be ending in searching irrelevant subjects at internet which will take a lot of time and hinder them to be successful in school.
The last but not the least reason that reinforces the preceding assertion that the young should have plan and be disciplined is that in the hectic life of today which people are plaguing with the enormous pressure and stress, being organized will help them to feel less stress. For instance, I remember when I was a student in high school, I used to do my tasks spontaneously and without any plan. It is crystal clear that this behavior made me extremely nervous especially on the nights before exams. While, if I had plan and did my studies in time, I would be stressed before the tests and also I would have better grades.
All in all, taking into account what was already mentioned, I do believe that in today's world, the young people need to be more disciplined and programmed for their future since by this way they can readily make appropriate decisions, they would not waste their valuable time, and they avoid from unnecessary stresses.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 44, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a tortuous way" with adverb for "tortuous"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...st and foremost, life is like a journey in a tortuous way, which bifurcates in many steps and the...
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Line 2, column 251, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'culminate'
Suggestion: culminate
...aspects and works that children do will culminates in having a well-organized mind. Theref...
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Line 3, column 180, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...their time as effectively as their can. for example, if a child want to do his or h...
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Line 3, column 246, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...nt to do his or her schoolwork but they dont have any timing and program for their w...
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Line 4, column 102, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'planned'.
Suggestion: planned
...ng assertion that the young should have plan and be disciplined is that in the hecti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2018.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74823529412 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55517495118 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527058823529 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.4886568546 48.9658058833 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.533333333 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3333333333 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148258688406 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608990386369 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0389502836815 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0940704987667 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343643371334 0.0645574589148 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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