TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
The idea that today's life is elaborate and intricate has become a cliche which no one will argue against. At the same time, there is no unity of opinions about whether an ability to plan and organize is essential for youngsters and young adults or not. As far as I concerned, the ability is a crucial characteristic of a successful person. The reasons on which my prospect is based will be discussed in details below.
Firstly, studying at all levels from elementary school to university demands from students to be organized and be able to plan their activities ahead. The system of modern education was designed to give as much as possible knowledge and skills within the shortest span of time possible. Consequently, a day of today's pupil consists of five to seven subjects which must be taught and repeated. A student has to plan when and what he is going to learn. By contrast, our predecessors studied under simpler program which had a goal to teach a child to write, read and do basic math.
Secondly, to be successful in today's workplace without having an ability to plan one's day is merely unthinkable. Our workplace is saturated with means of communications which allow us to learn news, and latest information via the internet or social media and our cell-phones made us available for contact 24/7. Today we have our business partners and colleagues who live in different time zones, on other continents and countries, thus we need to plan our day and organize it in order to be able to work with others and be predictable for them as well. Of course, in the past an average workplace looked simpler; a worker had a desk and papers on it, probably a typing machine and several pencils. It was a slow life which was less demanding of ability to plan and organize.
Admittedly, there are some reasons which may be mentioned by a person who believes that today's person may live happily without ability to plan and organize. Chiefly, one may aver that everything is organized for us and without us. We have automated assistants such as Siri who will do the job. However, I still buttress that the ability to plan is crucial for a person because Google and iPhone assistants those names of a few have quite a limited range of options. A person who heavily relies on such technology has become their hostage who cannot live in a modern world without them.
To wrap up, the ability to plan and organize is essential for a modern citizen, in fact, we cannot study, we cannot work without the ability and any electronic substitutes will not help a person, who does not have the ability to plan, to be successful.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Argument one and argument two are like two examples. Look at the topic sentences:
Firstly, studying at all levels from elementary school to university demands from students to be organized and be able to plan their activities ahead.
Secondly, to be successful in today's workplace without having an ability to plan one's day is merely unthinkable.
the reasons should be general, like:
first, it can save money. then why it can save money, then one example (in today's workplace...), then advantages of saving money
second, it can save time. then why it can save time , then one example (studying at all levels...), then advantages of saving time.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 462 350
No. of Characters: 2112 1500
No. of Different Words: 236 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.636 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.571 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.598 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.1 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.518 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.514 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 15, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'todays'' or 'today's'?
Suggestion: todays'; today's
The idea that todays life is elaborate and intricate has bec...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 82, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...place without having an ability to plan ones day is merely unthinkable. Our workplac...
^^^^
Line 7, column 89, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'todays'' or 'today's'?
Suggestion: todays'; today's
...mentioned by a person who believes that todays person may live happily without ability...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 587, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ot live in a modern world without them. To wrap up, the ability to plan and orga...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, still, thus, well, as to, in fact, of course, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2168.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70281995662 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65634142105 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516268980477 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 702.9 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6148067235 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.4 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.05 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174391049217 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.053501209435 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.047263118523 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106709601424 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374074006232 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.