TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends

By and large, it is established beyond doubt that friendship play a prominent role in all individual’s life. Because we start to know ourselves when we are in contact with other. Regarding this issue, some people hold the view that the ability to make new friends easily is more important than the ability to maintain friendship with small number of people over a long period of time. However others look at this concept throughout different lens and disagree with it and hold the opposite viewpoint. From my vantage point, the latter belief is true. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into two important reasons.

The first focal point that prompts me to hold this idea is that when someone has the ability to maintain friendships with people for long time, it is easy for him to find new friends because he know how to socialize. For example, when I was sixteen years old, I found three friends in neighborhood. We spend a lot of time in playground and play with each other. We grow up together and always kept in touch. But when we gone to different university, we lost our near connection. We all find new friends because we learnt how to build friendship with others. I can remember the first day of university I found friends, which was so pleasure for me. By the way, we still have one day in week reunion with my old friends.

Another equally salient point in corroborating my stance in this subject is in long period time friendship we learn how to be responsible with each other. Being responsible is vital for long term relationship, especially in marriage. For instance, back to my first example that we were group of friends that grow up together, one of them was a girl name Sara. I really liked her and always take care of her. During years I learnt how to be responsible with people that I like and the more you spend time with close friend , the more you learn about complicated relationship. This experience really helped me in my marriage with another girl. This knowledge would not be gain with short relationship with girls.

In conclusion, though some may disagree that the ability to maintain friendship with small number of people over a long period of time is more important than the ability to make new friends easily. Not only do we learn how to socialize, but also become responsible with people around us. Every individual person should experience long period friendship.

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Average: 7.7 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 115, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ent role in all individual's life. Because we start to know ourselves when we are ...
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Line 1, column 375, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...with small number of people over a long period of time. However others look at this concept th...
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Line 1, column 391, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...r of people over a long period of time. However others look at this concept throughout ...
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Line 3, column 195, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'knows'.
Suggestion: knows
... for him to find new friends because he know how to socialize. For example, when I w...
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Line 3, column 421, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'went'?
Suggestion: went
...r and always kept in touch. But when we gone to different university, we lost our ne...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...he more you spend time with close friend , the more you learn about complicated re...
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...with small number of people over a long period of time is more important than the ability to m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, really, regarding, so, still, for example, for instance, in conclusion, by and large, by the way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2004.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76009501188 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66214905251 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496437054632 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.3114604793 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.5 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5416666667 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.397108649826 0.236089414692 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111261979833 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.14162040339 0.0737576698707 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.298597158508 0.150856017488 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119837720267 0.0645574589148 186% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.77 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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