TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends

Both the reading and the lecture discuss how humpback whales manage to migrate long distance. The reading passage offers three possible explanations.However, the professor disputes with these explanations and provides other reasons as below.

To begin with, the passage indicates that because the humpback whales are very clever so they are capable of using stars to navigate. On the contrary, the professor disagrees with the theory by pointing out that there isn't a direct connection between intelligence and navigation by stars. Besides, the ducks, average of intelligence, still utilize stars as a navigation tool. Therefore, the theory seems not convincing.

Second, the article suggests that the humpback whales migrate in straight lines, relying on stars. Once again, the speaker highly debates the hypothesis and proposes that actually they have a special organ to sense the earth magnetic field called biometric. Furthermore, this fundamental material can help the whales find the route when they migrate long distance. Hence, the humpback whales unable to migrate by stars.

All in all, the reading passage illustrates that whales have a special skill, rare in other animals, named spy-hopping to navigate. Nevertheless, the lecturer calls the explanation into question by challenging that even though this behavior seldom occurs, there is still a kind of shark own this behavior to search their prey. That is, sharks use sky-hopping to capture food instead of migration. Apparently, humpback whales might not use this skill to migrate.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 150, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...sage offers three possible explanations.However, the professor disputes with these expl...
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Line 3, column 219, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...h the theory by pointing out that there isnt a direct connection between intelligenc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, apparently, besides, furthermore, hence, however, nevertheless, second, so, still, therefore, kind of, on the contrary, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 43.0788530466 37% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1320.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 238.0 407.700716846 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54621848739 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92775363542 4.48103885553 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83988858291 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 212.727598566 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.609243697479 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 618.680645161 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.1565730326 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2857142857 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2142857143 5.45110844103 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.043313541749 0.236089414692 18% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0149041975072 0.076458572812 19% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0225459795517 0.0737576698707 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0304156804247 0.150856017488 20% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0259559903837 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.61 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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