TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends

Friendship is one of great kinds of relationships. It is the truly meaning of honest, loyalty, confidence and love. I think that every person is in the needing of this relationship and i see that lonely person is looks like a body without soul. You can divide the types of friends to many kinds, as you know there are classmate friends, childhood friends, roommate friends and friends of your sporting team and every stage and almost every day you are exposure to have a new relationships. That's kinds of variety of friends are really exciting and interested however, i see that the real meaning of happiness doesn't occur until you have a very close friend.
In my view, a close friend is like my second family. Really it is very rare to find one that you easily get in touch with and feeling a comfortable and peace effect toward him, the one that has a shoulder to cry on when you are in trouble, the one that always be with you through thick and thin; so if you find one you will be a lucky person.
For example, at my first class on secondary school. I participated a seat with smart like girl. I felt that I would be awkward if I strike up a conversation with her but, I surprised when she began to introduce herself, she began with: hello, my name is Malika, would you mind to speak little with you?!! I felt very pleasant and we began to be close friends and we had a lot in common. She was the best close friend for me and the only one that is near and dear for me. For sure we had ups and downs in our relations, however we still friends till now, it is being almost 15 year and Malika is still my best friend and my second sister and I named my daughter Malika also!!

In conclusion, different kinds of relationships are very important in our live they make it tasty. But the true meaning of pleasant and happiness feeling is compatible by a very close friend.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 186, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...in the needing of this relationship and i see that lonely person is looks like a ...
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Line 1, column 476, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'relationship'?
Suggestion: relationship
...very day you are exposure to have a new relationships. Thats kinds of variety of friends are ...
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Line 1, column 491, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...e exposure to have a new relationships. Thats kinds of variety of friends are really ...
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Line 1, column 569, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...really exciting and interested however, i see that the real meaning of happiness ...
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Line 1, column 610, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... see that the real meaning of happiness doesnt occur until you have a very close frien...
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Line 3, column 272, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind speaking'.
Suggestion: mind speaking
...th: hello, my name is Malika, would you mind to speak little with you?!! I felt very pleasant...
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Line 3, column 305, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ld you mind to speak little with you?!! I felt very pleasant and we began to be c...
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Line 3, column 536, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'we' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'friend'
Suggestion: friend
...owns in our relations, however we still friends till now, it is being almost 15 year an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, really, second, so, still, for example, i think, in conclusion, you know, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.33522727273 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43953215776 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505681818182 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 99.2304710789 48.9658058833 203% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 117.384615385 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0769230769 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.30769230769 5.45110844103 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169684911858 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0574545483079 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0353630774527 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101146211832 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0150119200606 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.45 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.19 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 86.8835125448 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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