TPO- 54 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Government investment has attracted much social conern. A minority of sociologists believe that it is better for governments to spend more money in support of the art than in support of althletics. Personally, I bear in mind a strong disagreement with this belief.

On the one hand, what has been put under consideration is personal enjoyment. The fact is that althletics creates more chances for people to gather through sport matches such as World Cup of footballs or national champions of basketballs. Therefore, it is possible for many different people with the same interests to have more interaction and increase mutual communication with each others. As a result, they have tendencies to be more connected and attain a lot of support from others in any aspects of their lives. Consequently, this plays a crucial role in promoting humans' living condition and greatly filling them with satisfactory feelings. More importantly, it cannot be denied that althletics is a vital part of the world nowadays, thus, spending more money for althletics possesses a large probability for governments to follow the trend and have more connections with other nations. It leads to the fact that there is a likelihood for them to strengthen the relationships with each others and stimulate the cooperation in many aspect of life. On that ground, needless to say, governments have more opportunities to take part in with other nations to promote the countries' development. Subsequently, peole are certain to directly receives a lot of benefits from those cooperations. By and large, the spending of the government in althletics is a long-term investment that brings many values to residents.

On the other hand, some people might say that there are many bussiness groups nowadays having interests in athletics and sponsoring a lot of money for this field. Accordingly, the investment of Government is not considerable and should be put in other aspects such as the art. However, it is just a applicable to a minority. It is widely known that even the supports from individual groups is huge but they are not enough for the whole, especially national events of athletics. It follows that the investment of government is inevitable. Furthermore, the support from governments for athletics stand a golden chance for encouraging people to play sports and take part in physical activities more often. In this case, peole tend to increase trainning their bodies and obtain a better health. Correspondingly, it is apparent that they are bound to have refreshed minds and possibly attain the creativity to generate great ideas in their working. This, in turn, forms a significant contribution to people working productivities and helping them acquire more money for spending. As a consequence, people are inclined to upgrade their living adequacy and easily be provided with a huge amount of happiness. Beyond any doubt, the idea that the investment of governments to athletics is unnecessary is often possible to end in collapse.

In a word, all factors mentioned above are evidence supporting my disagreement. It is highly recommended that everyone should take my writing into careful consideration to have a suitable decision on understanding the investment of the Government.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, so, then, therefore, thus, such as, as a result, by and large, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2747.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 523.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25239005736 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12715441276 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493307839388 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 853.2 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.811457257 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.653846154 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1153846154 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30769230769 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213549472218 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0606714773406 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668383840809 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155029943698 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0690784898752 0.0645574589148 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 86.8835125448 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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