A big debate always takes place when it comes to considering the matter of how government should spend its revenue. It is claimed by some people that governments ought to provide more money to support arts than to athletics. However I strongly oppose this proposal.
First of all, athletics and arts are of great importance to a country. While arts can benefit people mentally, athletics can do advantages to people physically. Sponsoring Olympic teams helps to make people learn more about a particular sport, plenty opportunities will be offered to people. Sports equipment will be set up in the neighborhood, matches will be held every weekend. Consequently, people will get more exposure to sports and even get involved. Take Liverpool as an example, Liverpool is an England city famous for its football team. Football instantly became a popular sport in the area after the city sponsored the team, which greatly encouraged the citizens to play football. Every people in the city became a fantastic football player due to the investment of the local government.
In addition, the promotion of athletics not only helps the specific sport team to be popular but also enables the city to gain fame around the world. Since sport teams are always the symbol of a city, it represents the city and promotes the city to a bigger stage. Thus the popularity will pose a positive effect on building up the sense of pride to the citizens. For instance, people in Miami loves the Rocket, they are more than happy to see their favorite team wins a game, since therefore not only the basketball team but also the city will be more exposed to people throughout the world.
To sum up, I find it important to spend abundant money in athletics. Because improving athletics constructions can improve people's physical health and also help to build a sense of pride of the city among the citizens. That is to say, such practice benefit the city and the people in the city.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in addition, first of all, to sum up, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 43.0788530466 30% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86826347305 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63889844534 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541916167665 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3215335606 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3333333333 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5555555556 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72222222222 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120329583232 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0423983370146 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559898942635 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0887786954433 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0608897378768 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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