TPO 63 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Nowadays people are more willing to help people they don t know for example by giving clothing and food to people who need them than they were in the past Use specific reasons and examples to su

Going to the university is a transition point in people's lives. While some people believe that students should go on a trip or work in a company before going to university, others, however, stand on the other side of the continuum, asserting that there is no need for such a thing. As for my opinion, I subscribe to the latter idea. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into two of my most prominent reasons for advocating this viewpoint.

First and foremost, taking a year off creates a gap in pupils' learning process. There is no denying that this has deleterious repercussions on students' learning process. Students will forget a colossal amount of information, and it would take a considerable amount of time for them to revoke that information. On the other hand, if students go to the university immediately after high school, professors can make the best out of students' fresh knowledge, and start teaching right away. It is crystal clear that this enhances pupils' learning efficiency as well, and paves the way for their academic success. An example can drive this notion home. Most teachers have a hard time trying to back on their teaching track after each holiday, especially after the summer holiday. It is worth mentioning that summer is just three months, and being away from school for a year will have a much more severe effect.

Furthermore, another equally compelling reason for corroborating my stance lies in the fact that by staying away from school and education, pupils will lose their enthusiasm. It will be significantly arduous for students to establish the habit of studying again after a year. Moreover, by getting paid for working, students might consider the thought that they do not need to study and educate themselves since they can already make money and become independent of the people surrounding them. This can discourage them from studying, and take away their interest in studying. Therefore, it is substantially more reasonable for students to continue studying continuously. My personal example is a compelling illustration of this. When I was in high school, I took a part-time job at a restaurant. After a while, I managed to save a notable amount of money, and I started to think about quitting school and fully dedicating my time and effort to my current job. After consulting with my parents, they convinced me to continue my academic path and save my money for college. I just had a part-time job and I almost quit school. Having a full-time job for a year will have a significantly more negative effect on young people's mindset.

To put it all in a nutshell, having all the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I strongly believe that not studying a year after high school can have a negative effect on students, on the ground that they might forget what they have already learned, as well as it might discourage them from pursuing their academic path.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 72, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to process'
Suggestion: to process
...ar off creates a gap in pupils learning process. There is no denying that this has dele...
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Line 3, column 162, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to process'
Suggestion: to process
...ious repercussions on students learning process. Students will forget a colossal amount...
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Line 5, column 1216, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...ificantly more negative effect on young peoples mindset. To put it all in a nutshell...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as for, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2437.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 494.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93319838057 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8200153401 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502024291498 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 747.0 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.2514019768 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.541666667 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5833333333 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172466056815 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0510035511809 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465349273991 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110930333604 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416575700698 0.0645574589148 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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