TPO23- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's progressive and competitive world where we live, no one can turn a blind eye to the significant effects of completing works and affairs properly on people's lives. In this regard, some are inclined toward the opinion that fulfilling duties quickly and taking risks in accomplishing tasks is important for people. On the other extreme of the rope, others think that doing tasks slowly and being sure that everything is correct without any risk has reliable results. Although both sides take their own positions, personally speaking, I firmly believe that the latter group carries more weight. In the following paragraphs, I will cogently explain my reasons to justify my viewpoints.
As the first and paramount reason, taking a risk in doing tasks and duties leads to unreliable and destructive results which can affect negatively individuals' lives. To be more specific, when people fulfilling their works quickly, they will be more likely to make big mistakes because they cannot concentrate effectively on their tasks; therefore, they cannot pay attention to essential details efficiently. In this situation, they will cause irreparable problems having negative influences on others' lives. For instance, if constructive engineers design buildings quickly and do not consider scientific facts, they will construct unreliable buildings not resisting natural disasters such as earthquakes and floods. Hence, the more slowly individuals work and the more become ensured that everything is efficient and correct, the better outcomes they can obtain remarkably which do not threaten people's lives.
The second reason coming to my mind to substantiate my viewpoint is that working steadily and in a slow manner with high concentration can boost individuals' self-confidence significantly, which can help them to show productive and consistent performance in their future. In other words, if people try to fulfill their tasks quickly, they will experience numerous and frequent failures and disappointing experiments. Consequently, they will be less likely to become successful in getting optimum results. In this line of thought, they will suffer from a lack of sufficient self-esteem and cannot find viable solutions and pragmatic and rational approaches to deal effectively with their problems and unprecedented challenges in vicissitudes of their lives. Take my own experience as a compelling example. When I was a student at a university, I get used to doing my homework quickly. As a result, I always got minimum scores in my exams and lost trust in myself. In fact, since I experienced numerous bad records, I believed that I could not show good performance. Thus, if I tried hard to complete my tasks perfectly and evaluated that everything was correct, I could improve my self-confidence in getting good results.
In conclusion, doing tasks and duties slowly and paying attention to all critical details, which guarantees that everything is perfect, leads to more productive and fruitful consequences. Not only do people obtain reliable results, but also they can improve their self-confidence in finding rational and innovative ideas to address their problems properly and efficiently.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 95, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a slow manner" with adverb for "slow"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... viewpoint is that working steadily and in a slow manner with high concentration can boost indiv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, thus, as to, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2709.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 494.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48380566802 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05513272894 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536437246964 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 816.3 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9602286932 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.0 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5238095238 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167832955086 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0474550151418 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457797688237 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111341424307 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514499771617 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 86.8835125448 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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