TPO28- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Parents today are more involved in their children's education than parents were in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

It has been a controversial topic whether parents today are more involved in their children's education than were parents in the past. As for me, I agree with the statement, and below are my reasons.

First of all, parents care about money, and modern parents possess more money so that they can invest in their children's education. For example, the average Taiwanese parents earn around 200,000 NT dollars per month, meaning they do have some extra money to cultivate their children. They will bring their kids to cram schools for further intensive academic education. Also, they will take their children to violin or piano classes. Apparently, parents nowadays do have more budget on their children's education. On the other hand, 20 years ago, people in Taiwan were not rich enough. The average salary for every family is only about 50,000 NT dollars. Parents had to use their salary to pay the rent, and purchase groceries. Therefore, parents in the past did not have a sufficient budget for their children's education.

In addition, parents today have fewer kids than parents in the past, so they are able to pay more attention to their kids' educational activities. For instance, I am the only child in my family, so my mom put a lot of effort into educating me about different kinds of knowledge. I went to a private primary school because my mom wanted her only child to have ^ English class taught by native speakers. Evidently, I possess a lot of education resources from parents because I am the only child. On the contrary, when my mom was young, since she had seven other siblings, their parents did not care too much about their education. My grandfather had to try his best to earn a living for eight kids, not to mention their education. As a result, parents in the past were not involved in their kids' education because there were too many kids for them to look after.

Last but not the least, parents nowadays place more emphasis on their fame than parents in the old days, so they are involved in their children's educational affairs in order to maintain their good fame. For example, in Taiwan, some parents will punish their kids if they do not get good grades because they want their children to be doctors or lawyers in the future so that they can tell neighbors that they have successful sons or daughters. In contrast, two decades ago, Taiwan was in an economic recession, all parents cared were if they could survive tomorrow. They did not have further effort on how to earn a decent reputation by educating their kids. Evidently, parents in the old days did not focus on their kids’ education since they had more important issues to concern.

To conclude, it is obvious that parents today are more dedicated to their children's education. After all, modern parents make more money, modern parents have fewer kids, and modern families are concerned about their reputation more than parents in the past.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, if, look, so, therefore, after all, as for, for example, for instance, in addition, in contrast, as a result, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2435.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 504.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83134920635 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44534331958 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454365079365 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 751.5 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4998070584 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.16 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339175337998 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126828500882 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0984794354555 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265319759546 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.084949502508 0.0645574589148 132% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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