In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.

Traffic jam nowadays is a big problem concerning modern people. Because purchasing cars, especially expensive cars, is considered as one of the representation of wealth and status, there will be increasing cars in our society over time in many people's opinion. Contrary to their opinion is my perspective that there will be fewer cars in use in twenty years.

All all the reasons of why the number of cars in use in the future will decrease, the most important one is related to environment pollution, in particular, the air pollution. There is well-acknowledged that the environment conditions is getting worse and worse and it is urgent for human beings to take some actions to make some changes. Otherwise, we will be exposed to an unsuitable living condition, in which the polluted air is devastating to human and environmental health. Under this circumstance, people are likely advocated to abandon the addiction to automobiles and instead to take mass transit like subways or commute by bicycle. Consequently, the private cars in use will decrease. For example, the government of Xi;an, modern and metropolitan city in China recently issued and implemented several regulations and laws to encourage citizens to take cars as less as possible. To be more specific, they first planned to build two more new subways across the city from west to east and from north to south, respectively. In addition, they introduced sharing bikes, which spread throughout the city, to facilitate the daily transportation of residents. What's more, they restricted the number of cars running in the streets and roads. All these actions will engage more and more dwellers to take mass transit and abandon their addiction to the automobiles, contributing to the declining cars in the present and future.

In addition, another primary reason I believe that the cars in use will be fewer than today revolves around the advancement of technology. With the introduction of technology into the education and work field, no longer do students and employees need to go to schools or workplaces for study or work. In other words, technologies allow people to study online or work remote. As the requirements for going out are decrease, cars are not as necessary as they are today in the future.

In conclusion, people will be encouraged to take cars as less as possible owing to the environment problems and reduce their need for cars on account of the fact that they can study or work online. Take the aforementioned reasons into consideration, I believe that in twenty years, there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, so, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in particular, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2184.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05555555556 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95947421924 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511574074074 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7901230703 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.947368421 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7368421053 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78947368421 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393314558449 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131069904677 0.076458572812 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.157817217458 0.0737576698707 214% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277668238578 0.150856017488 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0947114450612 0.0645574589148 147% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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