Video games are waste of time

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Video games are waste of time

Nowadays, with the development of the technology, there are enormous amount of entertainment sources which we can use for personal desire. To my mind, it is quite straightforward that besides their advantages, these entertainment sources, especially video games, have potential drawbacks too. And these problems have a very detrimental impact on people, specifically on children.
Firstly, I assume that the worst problem which is associated with video games is time consumption. To be more precise, while entertaining ourselves with these extraordinary and quite addictive video games, we are significantly wasting our time. As we all know, time is the most precious concept which we have in this life, and we need to approach and organize it very carefully. However, these video games are so addictive that when you start playing them, it is very challenging for you to stop, and this situation could have some adverse influence on our children.
Secondly, it is obvious that the most fameous video games are those which contain excess amount of violence. Moreover, when we permit our children to play such kind of games, the actual consequences could be tragic. To my mind, due to this concept, it is not acceptable to let our children play numerous amount of violent games.
Thirdly, I consider playing games as a horrible way of spending free time. Based on my own experience, when I was a child, I use to be engaged in variety of activities which were associated with physical games. And also, by going out to the yard, I have encountered enormous amount of people which became my friends afterwards. Consequently, in contemporary conditions, I have significantly large and diverse surrounding.
Fourthly, I assume that instead of spending tremendous amounts of hours on video games, our children could be engaged in other activities, which are much more beneficial for them. Indeed, by doing so, they can enlarge their outlook or improve their knowledge about the world in which they are inhabiting. To my mind, if children start to utilize internet correctly, they can develop themselves as a highly intellectual individuals, which will be very profitable for them in the future.
In conclusion, I consider wasting our precious time by playing video games, as a very detrimental action in a humans life. Therefore, it would be much more worthwhile for us, generally for our children to spend their free time more effectively.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, while, in conclusion, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2043.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15909090909 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98392433864 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502525252525 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.812272261 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.526315789 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8421052632 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229010643134 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0816440751803 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102323839556 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12562372866 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102294218727 0.0645574589148 158% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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