When schools do not have enough funding or teachers some people think physical education classes should be cut while others believe that courses in art and music should be eliminated first Which do you think is preferable and why

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When schools do not have enough funding or teachers, some people think physical education classes should be cut, while others believe that courses in art and music should be eliminated first. Which do you think is preferable, and why?

There is no shortage of debate about whether it is better to eliminate the physical education class or the art class first when the school running out of debts. In my opinion, I would take the art classes out of school before the physical education class. I feel this way for two reasons which I will further explore in this essay.

To begin with, Children enjoy coming to schools only because of the physical education classes. It gives them an opportunity to play with their friends as well as learn new things that almost every child likes. I have to say that my very own experience is a compelling example of this. I remember my mom often saying to me that I'll go to school happily only on the day time table has a physical education class. So, If the school plans to take this class out first then children will naturally hate to come to the school and parents will start to look for other schools. As a result, may children may discontinue that further reduces the fundings they get. Thus, It is worthwhile to conduct physical education classes than an art class.

Secondly, Physical education classes take care of the student's heath. Though, the art classes provide relaxation to students it will no have the health benefits that physical education class provides. For instance, a survey conducted in my brother's school recently showed that the students who opted for sports as an extracurricular are healthier both physically and mentally than students who opted for other extracurriculars. Moreover, after the survey results, many parents enrolled their children in the sports class that increased the fundings of the institution.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that physical education classes are more important than the art classes and schools should prefer to eliminate the art classes when they are in bankruptcy. It gives the schools an increase in funding and also take cares of their students health.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 55, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...ical education classes take care of the students heath. Though, the art classes provide ...
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Line 5, column 71, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...lasses take care of the students heath. Though, the art classes provide relaxation to ...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1605.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93846153846 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62698963763 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501538461538 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3647875573 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.3125 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3125 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9375 5.45110844103 201% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241395729904 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0924930832337 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0744482011354 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180896998412 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544637844201 0.0645574589148 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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