When schools do not have enough funding or teachers, some people think physical education classes should be cut, while others believe that courses in art and music should be eliminated first. Which do you think is preferable, and why?
When a school is no longer able to afford teaching, the first courses that should be ended are art and music bacause they require a lot of money and very specialized kinds of teachers. Physical education is cheaper and more important to keep children healthy.
Altought it is significant for kids to learn arts, they do not constitute a primordial part of basic education. Painting, dancing, sculpting and playing an instrument can be thought at home or with private techears when youngsters are insterested on those topics. Nevertheless, mathematics, english, history and biology are compulsory because they represent what a person should know by default. Also, most of these activities require a lot of economical investment. For example: If a boy or a girl want to learn painting, they must have special papers, painting and brushes of different types, as well as a teacher with knowledge in visual art, drawing and painting techniques.
Physical education, on the other hand, does not requiere a lot of spending, is easy to teach and play a big role on the health of students. Plus, kids can spend a lot of time perfectioning their skills and learning to be part of a team. Running, athletism and yoga, for example, are gret ways of keeping children active and do not require any equipment. Other sports like football, volley ball and basket ball need only a ball and several players. Another advantage of schools teaching physical education over arts is that there is easier to find sports teachers, rather than art ones. Thus, sports are very important to maintain healthy children and creating a habit that will benefit them on the long run.
In conclusion, although arts and music can be beneficial for children growth, teaching them physical edution will help them to keep a healthy lifestyle.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 43, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to teach'.
Suggestion: to teach
...en a school is no longer able to afford teaching, the first courses that should be ended...
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Line 3, column 514, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to paint'.
Suggestion: to paint
...ample: If a boy or a girl want to learn painting, they must have special papers, paintin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, nevertheless, so, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 43.0788530466 32% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1511.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 301.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01993355482 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74005625877 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.611295681063 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1251965535 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.928571429 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201217400647 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0605662924231 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566108436218 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130582556788 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05931843251 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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