Why do you think people attend college or university?
Nowadays, More and more people are attending college or university all over the world. On account of the fact that people understand more deeply how important to gain in-depth knowledge and enhancing our skill. I contend that higher education gives you a decent job and abundant knowledge of your major even more how to communicate with different type of person in our competitive society. I feel this way for two major reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, Pursuing a degree make a chance for us to prepare our future career which is highly competitive decent salary jobs or fulfil of goals with more ease. Most of the universities and colleges run the program by cooperating with some very successful companies which may provide vacancy for your interested fields and they tell you what kind of employee they want in the company. The only thing you must remember that these companies have very high requirements regarded as sophisticated education, high qualified skills to cooperate with your other colleagues, etc. Therefore, universities trigger a chance which is more easily obtain this opportunity than not studying students in this academic program.
Secondly, the university helps us to develop our hidden abilities even more pure talent. In the USA Many liberal arts college offer to take the various type of course which allows us to become more self-confident, an ambitious multitasking individual in our community. For instance, becoming an engineer you have to take a lot of science class and sometimes you just so exhausted and disappointed, that moment you may interest in taking an art or photography class and you have more energetic than before. Because of the fact that colleges permit that you develop your hobby even though you take a lot of scientific credit in the semester. In other words, in Mongolian high school, a lot of students haven’t any chance to develop their hobbies because of lacking space in and depletion of supporting institute and programs. They usually pursuing just only professional career for their entire life instead of absorbing hobbies. However, In most of the cases companies would prefer to hire an employee who has a knowledgeable and great number of abilities such as playing soccer, volleyball or singing a song playing the piano rather than has just only academic achievement. the colleges and universities have a number of programs and courses which are beneficial for your future career and your interpersonal skills.
To sum up, Everyone wants to live in a better life and build a bright future for their children. Nevertheless, In the twenty-first century which is well known for technology world that is being changed every second if you are willing to live in a better situation than others you have to absorb great knowledge and qualify your abilities more intensively. since it Is not the physical contest in the previous century it’s absolutely mentality war. Therefore, University and colleges obviously give you this opportunity that fulfils one’s life goals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, kind of, of course, such as, first of all, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2577.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 500.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.154 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82682790421 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 827.1 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.5170919627 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.85 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184166095096 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615481249679 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0686626546245 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119824047562 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022515892801 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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