Your friend has the opportunity to choose either one of two types of majors (fields of study), which one of the following two majors do you think is a better choice, and why?
– A major that would allow him to finish years of study and get a degree sooner (so that he would begin to work full-time quickly). Or
– A major that requires many years of study that would provide him with more employment opportunities and offers in the future.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Be sure to use your own words. Do not memorize some certain examples.
Nowadays, high school students wonder whether it would be better to select a major that allows them to finish their studies sooner and begin to work full-time quickly, or they should peak a major that requires many years of study that give you more job opportunities at the end. In my opinion, a major that requires many years of study would be a better choice because if you have more employment opportunities, it would be less risky to find an appropriate job; besides, you could use the facilities of the university more by spending more time in university. I will illustrate my reasons in the next paragraphs.
First, choosing a major that leads you to more job opportunities would be less risky. Indeed, when you are going to choose a job, if numerous job opportunities be available for you, you can evaluate them and choose the one that you like more than others. Conversely, on the other hand, if you have a few options, you have no choice except choosing one of them even if you don’t like them as much as you expected. For example, when my brother, Mohsen, was going to choose a major, he decided to choose one that allows him to finish his studies sooner because he wanted to find a full-time job and marry as soon as possible. Hence, although he finished his studies very soon and found a full-time job after that, he couldn’t endure the difficulties of his job and seek another job because it wasn’t his favorite job. Indeed, he had just one job opportunity after graduation and he had to peak it. Maybe, if he chose another major that required long years of study he could choose a better job among the available opportunities.
Second, students can use the facilities of the university more by spending more time in university. Undoubtedly, the university is a place that you can enhance your knowledge by learning new things in a fun and academic atmosphere without any concern about the costs. As a result, if you finish your studies soon, you may lose your chance for further learning by using the facilities of the university such as good professors, equipped laboratories, libraries, cheap materials, etc. For instance, when I was a student at university, although I could finish my studies sooner, I decided to slow down and stay more in university because I was invited to work on an experimental project in which the costs were borne by the university. Thus, it was a great chance to learn a lot of new things through doing a scientific project without any cost. Consequently, at the end of the project, I succeeded to submit two scientific papers for a well-known journal. Furthermore, these papers and the experience of working in such a project, helped me to have a better resume that was essential to find an excellent job in a pioneer steel making factory.
Based on the aforementioned reasons, it can be concluded that choosing a major that needs longer studies to finish, would be a better idea.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, conversely, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, second, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2354.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73641851107 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76605006432 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468812877264 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 742.5 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.4535730628 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.777777778 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6111111111 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.27777777778 5.45110844103 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34807114637 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112969340941 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0733867923819 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213123506195 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375434464451 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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