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Although the sale of rhinoceros horns is illegal worldwide, rhinoceroses (Rhinos) are commonly poached (hunted illegally) for their horns, which can be sold for tens of thousands of dollars per kilogram. Rhino horns are so valuable that one type of rhino is already extinct because poachers killed too many of them. All rhinos may soon become extinct unless something is done to help save them. Several ideas have been suggested
The first idea is for wildlife experts to “dehorn" Rhinos living in the wild. Dehorning means removing the horns of living rhinos to make them less attractive to poachers Horns can be removed without hurting the animals if medical equipment and drugs to calm the animals are used When this strategy was tried on a small scale in the early 1990s; none of the rhinos dehorned at the time were killed by poachers.
The second possibility is to educate consumers. The majority of rhino horn sold is used in medicines Although rhino horn is believed to have health benefits, this belief has no scientific foundation Rhino horn consists almost entirely of keratin, the same material found in human hair and nails. Keratin has no known health value. Educating consumers about keratin could greatly decrease the demand for rhino horn
The third possibility is to legalize government sales of rhino horn. Some governments have large amounts of horn, taken from poachers they have arrested This horn is often kept in storage. However, if government sales were legal, large quantities of horn that governments already have could be sold at very low prices Poachers kill rhinos because consumers pay high prices for their horns If governments started selling cheap rhino horn, rhino poaching would no longer be profitable and would probably stop, at least for a while. That might help endangered rhino populations to recover.

The reading states that due to the demand and value of rhinoceros horns, the rhinos are poached, leading to one type of rhino going extinct. In the passage, the author has introduced three ways to stop poachers from hunting rhinos. However, the professor states that each suggestion has significant weaknesses.
First, the passage states that by dehorning rhinos, they would be less attractive to poachers, effectively stopping them from hunting the species. The professor argues against this notion pointing out that this suggestion is impractical. To do such an operation, we must find and prepare the rhinos and remove their horns. Other than the hardships that such an endeavor presents, the horns are there for the survival of this animal. The rhinos use their horns to dig for water and protect their territory and children. Hence, dehorning them would be disadvantageous for their survival in the wild.
Second, the passage posits that most rhino horns are sold as medicine, and the buyers would be discouraged from buying them by educating customers about them having no medical value. But the lecturer explains that peoples' belief about the horns being powerful medicine is ancient, and it is such a strong idea that it would be tough to change their mindset using scientific evidence.
Third, the article states that by legalizing the sales of rhino horns and lowering their prices, the poachers won't benefit from the sales and would stop hunting them altogether. However, the professor points out that many people do not buy horns because the sale of horns is illegal. By changing the law, buying them would seem acceptable, leading to demand growth. Therefore, poachers would continue hunting for such a large and lucrative market.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1463.0 1373.03311258 107% => OK
No of words: 284.0 270.72406181 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1514084507 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50223813721 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 145.348785872 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542253521127 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 427.5 419.366225166 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.1832760016 49.2860985944 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5333333333 110.228320801 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9333333333 21.698381199 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 7.06452816374 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28753394968 0.272083759551 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.098588958961 0.0996497079465 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769642445535 0.0662205650399 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178897016141 0.162205337803 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0318074628414 0.0443174109184 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.3589403974 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 63.6247240618 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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