Altruism is a type of behavior in which an animal sacrifices its own interest for that of another animal or group of animals Altruism is the opposite of selfishness individuals performing altruistic acts gain nothing for themselves Examples of altruism

Both the reading and the lecture discuss about altruism, and whether individuals performing altruism benefit from altruistic act. The author of the passage, believes individual performing altruistic act get nothing out of it and provides two examples, However the lecturer casts doubts on the claims made by author. He in fact thinks that individual benefit from act.

First of all, the author of the reading passages states that many animals sacrifice food and also put their life in danger, while assisting other members of their group. Author takes an example of meerkat, where an individual acts as guard and looks out for predator, while other members hunt for food. If the individual sees a predator it makes a sounds which alerts other members of the group but puts itself in danger. In contrast, the lecturer counters this claims, He argues that according to recent study on meerkat behaviour, the meerkat which takes on responsibility of guarding other members of meerkat from predator, eats before taking the guard. Additionally, He goes on to say that recent study has also shown that meerkat who stand guards, is first to see the predator and can easily escape from predator by running into burrows.Further more this sentinel meerkat puts other members at great risk by making alarm sound.

Finally, the text suggests that humans perform altruistic act and takes an example of donation of body organs to family member and donation, which in turn provide no significant reward to the donor. On the other hand, the professor in the lecture counters that, with example of donor donating his kidney to relative or stranger. He points out that the donor recieves non material reward, such donor receives appreciation. Further more, he says that donor gains increased self worth from the act of donating kidney.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 347, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a sound' or simply 'sounds'?
Suggestion: a sound; sounds
...the individual sees a predator it makes a sounds which alerts other members of the group...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 843, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Further
...e from predator by running into burrows.Further more this sentinel meerkat puts other m...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, so, while, in contrast, in fact, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 10.4613686534 10% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1525.0 1373.03311258 111% => OK
No of words: 299.0 270.72406181 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10033444816 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53033850426 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 145.348785872 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57525083612 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 419.366225166 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.4604660647 49.2860985944 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.083333333 110.228320801 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9166666667 21.698381199 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.16666666667 7.06452816374 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19574120458 0.272083759551 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0767325815264 0.0996497079465 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698494142638 0.0662205650399 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127431216076 0.162205337803 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539075143842 0.0443174109184 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.3589403974 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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