Extra 1 - Integrated writing

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Extra 1 - Integrated writing

The main idea of both the passage and the talk is about starting a new business whether independently or using the franchising method. In the text, the author provides three main advantages of using franchising strategy. The author challenges all the viable benefits and believes that none of them is possible.

Firstly, the author states that business owners are able to find a reliable suppliers of goods and services if they buy a franchise. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that most of the franchising companies managers force small businesses to buy a high quality products which are very expensive. Thus, owners of small businesses will waste a tremendous amount of money to obtain their goods in compare to buying a goods which they individually want.

Moreover, the author asserts that by franchising method small businesses will save a lot of money on advertising. In the contrary, the speaker points out that new businesses should pay 6% of their sales to a franchise company. The mentioned percent is very huge, and new companies are able to advertise their companies with less than mentioned amount of money by their own and more efficiently. Besides, a franchise company does not advertise a small companies, and they only advertise its brands and products.

Eventually, the reading passage holds the opinion that new businesses will increase their security by using franchising method. The lecturer, on the other hand, says that the reading passage did not mentioned a most reliable issue which can be used by owners to enhance their security and that is buying a independent companies ownership. In this case, their chance to be successful in their business will be increased two times.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ieves that none of them is possible. Firstly, the author states that business...
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Line 3, column 82, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'supplier'?
Suggestion: supplier
...ness owners are able to find a reliable suppliers of goods and services if they buy a fra...
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Line 3, column 276, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'product'?
Suggestion: product
... small businesses to buy a high quality products which are very expensive. Thus, owners ...
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Line 3, column 427, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a good' or simply 'goods'?
Suggestion: a good; goods
...obtain their goods in compare to buying a goods which they individually want. M...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... goods which they individually want. Moreover, the author asserts that by fra...
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Line 5, column 359, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...anies with less than mentioned amount of money by their own and more efficiently....
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y advertise its brands and products. Eventually, the reading passage holds th...
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Line 7, column 204, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'mention'
Suggestion: mention
..., says that the reading passage did not mentioned a most reliable issue which can be used...
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Line 7, column 308, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nhance their security and that is buying a independent companies ownership. In th...
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Line 7, column 310, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ance their security and that is buying a independent companies ownership. In thi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, conversely, first, firstly, if, moreover, thus, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1439.0 1373.03311258 105% => OK
No of words: 281.0 270.72406181 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12099644128 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7896451902 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 145.348785872 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501779359431 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 441.9 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4968120912 49.2860985944 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.692307692 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6153846154 21.698381199 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.69230769231 7.06452816374 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 4.19205298013 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.3589403974 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 63.6247240618 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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