Integrated Writing TPO32

The reading passage and the speaker both discuss strange noises found by Russian submarines. The article provides three possible theories. However, the scholar casts doubt on all points mentioned in the passage.

First of all, the reading passage maintains that the sound might have come from Orca whales during a courtship ritual. Nonetheless, the lecturer contradicts the point by arguing that Orca whales were living on the surface of water, yet submarines were sunk in the deep ocean, and it was impossible for submarines to hear sounds on the surface. Moreover, whales were detectable by sonar if they were nearby submarines. Apparently, it is unlikely that the sounds came from Orca whales.

Secondly, the article states that the sounds might have been made by giant squid as this marine creature lived deep in the ocean and difficult to detect by sonar. Nevertheless, the professor refutes the statement by mentioning that the sounds started from 1960 to 1980. Yet, the voices disappeared afterwards. On the other hand, giant squid always lived in the deep ocean. Therefore, it is impossible for squids to make sounds for two decades, and stop making the sounds for another two decades.

Lastly, the article believes that the sounds might have been stray sounds from some military technology from other countries. Once again, the lecturer contends that foreign submarines could not move quickly. Furthermore, the sounds of engines from submarines could not be similar to froglike sounds. As a result, it is unlikely that the weird sounds came from other submarines.

To conclude, the lecturer successfully refutes all of the theories presented in the passage. That is to say, he maintains that the strange sounds could not caused by Orca whales, giant squid, and foreign submarines.

Votes
Average: 8 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 48, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...lude, the lecturer successfully refutes all of the theories presented in the passage. Tha...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 67, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...successfully refutes all of the theories presented in the passage. That is to say...
^^
Line 9, column 158, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'cause'
Suggestion: cause
...tains that the strange sounds could not caused by Orca whales, giant squid, and foreig...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, first, furthermore, however, if, lastly, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, as a result, first of all, on the other hand, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1515.0 1373.03311258 110% => OK
No of words: 289.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24221453287 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58331323336 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515570934256 0.540411800872 95% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 419.366225166 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.9027395597 49.2860985944 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.1666666667 110.228320801 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0555555556 21.698381199 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1666666667 7.06452816374 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.436307783996 0.272083759551 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12186729491 0.0996497079465 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0848912203879 0.0662205650399 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215539508105 0.162205337803 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118223806153 0.0443174109184 267% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.2367328918 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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