One of the threats to endangered sea turtle species is the use of nets by commercial shrimp fishing boats When turtles get accidentally caught in the nets they cannot rise to the surface of the ocean to breathe and they die Some people suggest that this p

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One of the threats to endangered sea turtle species is the use of nets by commercial shrimp-fishing boats. When turtles get accidentally caught in the nets, they cannot rise to the surface of the ocean to breathe, and they die. Some people suggest that this problem can be solved through an invention called a turtle excluder device (TED) that is incorporated into the nets. A TED provides a passage through which the turtles can escape. However, TEDs have been criticized for several reasons.

First, some shrimpers (shrimp fishers) argue that turtles get trapped only rarely: it is estimated that on average, one shrimp boat accidentally catches about one turtle every month. On the other hand, using TEDs costs the shrimpers some of their catch. Every time the shrimpers cast the nets, a certain percentage of shrimp manage to escape through the turtle passages. The shrimpers complain that the cost of losing shrimp on a daily basis is too high in comparison with the small chance of saving one turtle.

Second, there are alternative methods of protecting sea turtles that may be more effective than TEDs. One method that can be used is shortening the time limit that shrimp boats are allowed to keep their nets underwater. When the time limit is reached, the nets have to be pulled up to the surface, allowing any turtles caught in the net to get air and also giving shrimpers the opportunity to release the turtles from the nets.

Third, TEDs are not effective for larger species of endangered sea turtles. Some species like loggerhead and leatherback turtles can grow to be quite large and cannot fit through the escape passage that standard TEDs provide. Such turtles cannot escape from the nets even if the nets are equipped with TEDs.

The reading and the lecture are both about the TEDs,which seem to
be useful for shrimpers to prevent the escape of Sea Turtles.While the reading mentions three reasons why this device might not be effective towards preventing escape of the Sea Turtle, the professor in the lecture refutes this argument considering it unconvincing and challenges all the points mentioned in the reading passage.

Firstly, the reading states that a significant percentage of shrimps escape through the net openings.Therefore,losing shrimps are yhigher as compared to the chance of saving a single Turtle.The professor challenges this point by positing that thousands of Sea Turtles are caught yearly since thousands of shrimpers operate along the coastal area of the United states.Hence, the professor opposes the first point from the reading passage.

Secondly, the text outlines that another effective way aside from the use of TED is to lower the time limit by ensuring that those nets are pulled to the surfaces before any turtles caught are allowed to breathe in air.Nevertheless, the professor counteracts this point by explaining that implementing time limit is impossible to enforce because thousands of shrimp boats are located in different places and as a result, it is unlikely for the governments to monitor all the shrimp boats.Additionally, he states that assessing all the shrimp boats at the ports by ensuring they both contain nets and TEDs is likely to be effective.Thus, the point from the text cannot be supported by evidence.

Finally, the author of the passage claims that the TEDs won’t be efficient for larger species of Sea Turtles such as loggerheads and leather bags since they can’t fit in the passages made available by the TEDs.In contrast, the lecturer rejects this point by indicating that constructing TEDs when needed are unlikely to present problems because the designs can easily be modified without affecting it functions.Therefore, the point in the passage can be considered invalid.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, hence, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, in contrast, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 30.3222958057 155% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1711.0 1373.03311258 125% => OK
No of words: 318.0 270.72406181 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38050314465 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21524080384 2.5805825403 125% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 145.348785872 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512578616352 0.540411800872 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 519.3 419.366225166 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 13.0662251656 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 79.0 21.2450331126 372% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 114.492357824 49.2860985944 232% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 427.75 110.228320801 388% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 79.5 21.698381199 366% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 32.25 7.06452816374 457% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 26.0 4.19205298013 620% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 4.45695364238 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195550763002 0.272083759551 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11293874097 0.0996497079465 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520005102572 0.0662205650399 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0918139948899 0.162205337803 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.064121837784 0.0443174109184 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 43.7 13.3589403974 327% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -8.71 53.8541721854 -16% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 5.55761589404 263% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 34.1 11.0289183223 309% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.11 12.2367328918 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.83 8.42419426049 140% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 63.6247240618 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 10.7273730684 261% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 33.6 10.498013245 320% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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