One of the threats to endangered sea turtle species is the use of nets by commercial shrimp fishing boats When turtles get accidentally caught in the nets they cannot rise to the surface of the ocean to breathe and they die Some people suggest that this p

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One of the threats to endangered sea turtle species is the use of nets by commercial shrimp-fishing boats. When turtles get accidentally caught in the nets, they cannot rise to the surface of the ocean to breathe, and they die. Some people suggest that this problem can be solved through an invention called a turtle excluder device (TED) that is incorporated into the nets. A TED provides a passage through which the turtles can escape. However, TEDs have been criticized for several reasons.

First, some shrimpers (shrimp fishers) argue that turtles get trapped only rarely: it is estimated that on average, one shrimp boat accidentally catches about one turtle every month. On the other hand, using TEDs costs the shrimpers some of their catch. Every time the shrimpers cast the nets, a certain percentage of shrimp manage to escape through the turtle passages. The shrimpers complain that the cost of losing shrimp on a daily basis is too high in comparison with the small chance of saving one turtle.

Second, there are alternative methods of protecting sea turtles that may be more effective than TEDs. One method that can be used is shortening the time limit that shrimp boats are allowed to keep their nets underwater. When the time limit is reached, the nets have to be pulled up to the surface, allowing any turtles caught in the net to get air and also giving shrimpers the opportunity to release the turtles from the nets.

Third, TEDs are not effective for larger species of endangered sea turtles. Some species like loggerhead and leatherback turtles can grow to be quite large and cannot fit through the escape passage that standard TEDs provide. Such turtles cannot escape from the nets even if the nets are equipped with TEDs.

The reading and the lecture are both about the turtle excluder device, which seems to provide a way for sea turtles to escape.While the reading passage mentions that this device is unlikely to be effective for a plethora of reasons, the professor in the lecture refutes this argument by stating that the turtle excluder device would serve numerous benefits for the sea turtles when attached to the shrimp boats.

Firstly, the reading passage states that the sea turtles are trapped on rare occasions because the boats usually catch one turtle by chance every month and as a result, a certain percentage of the shrimp boats try to escape through the turtle passage.The professor challenges this point by positing that about thousands of shrimp boats operate in the United States and catches thousands of turtles every year resulting in small population of the sea turtle.Besides, considering the impact indicates that sea turtle population affect the sea turtle industry as a whole.Hence, the professor opposes the first point from the passage.

Secondly, the text outlines that other ways of protecting the sea turtle is by reducing the duration of time that the shrimp boats are allowed to keep their net underwater.Nevertheless, the professor counteracts this point by explaining that time limit is very important for enforcement because thousands of shrimp boats are found and the government are unlikely to track the time limit.What is more, is to check the boats at the port by ensuring the turtle excluder device is coupled with it.Therefore, the point from the text cannot be supported by the evidence.

Finally, the author of the passage claims that the turtle excluder device is not suitable for greater species of susceptible sea turtles such as loggerhead and leatherback turtles because they won’t fit into the passage that the normal TEDs provide.In contrast, the lecturer rejects this point by indicating that they might be small for large species.However, in area where they are needed they could be design in a way that wouldn’t affect their functions.Thus, one larger turtle excluder device is unlikely to be a problem.

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besides, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, in contrast, such as, as a result, what is more

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 10.4613686534 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1807.0 1373.03311258 132% => OK
No of words: 347.0 270.72406181 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20749279539 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90332341418 2.5805825403 113% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458213256484 0.540411800872 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 553.5 419.366225166 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 13.0662251656 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 86.0 21.2450331126 405% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.3863180907 49.2860985944 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 451.75 110.228320801 410% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 86.75 21.698381199 400% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 39.25 7.06452816374 556% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 4.19205298013 501% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282948613431 0.272083759551 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.178181186213 0.0996497079465 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0236177685166 0.0662205650399 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178181186213 0.162205337803 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0236177685166 0.0443174109184 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 46.5 13.3589403974 348% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -15.81 53.8541721854 -29% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 5.55761589404 234% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 36.8 11.0289183223 334% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.12 12.2367328918 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.59 8.42419426049 138% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 63.6247240618 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 10.7273730684 247% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 36.4 10.498013245 347% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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