The passage claims that increasing salt level in lake's water, which makes it hard for birds and fishes to go on living there and would transform the lake into a dead zone, would be solved the trend which is harmful to the lake's health by point

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The passage claims that increasing salt level in lake's water, which makes it hard for birds and fishes to go on living there and would transform the lake into a dead zone, would be solved the trend which is harmful to the lake's health by pointing out three reasons for support. The professor, on the other hand, state that the theories would be great but they are not practical.

The passage claims that increasing salt level in lake's water, which makes it hard for birds and fishes to go on living there and would transform the lake into a dead zone, would be solved the trend which is harmful to the lake's health by pointing out three reasons for support. The professor, on the other hand, state that the theories would be great but they are not practical.

First of all, the writer goes on to mention that the salt could be removed directly from the water and after the materials dissolved in the water would be left, the freshwater would be cooled and returned to the lake. On the contrary, the professor rejects this by explaining that water evaporating would lead to other material dissolved in the water would be left behind. This materials bring a serious problem and posed a health risk for people who breathe the air carried by the wind.

Furthermore, the reading argues that water from the ocean could be transported into the lake in order to diminish the level of salt. Conversely, the professor supports an opposite vies as compared to that presented in the passage; she describes that bringing ocean water from one 100 kilometers away into the lake, requires pipelines or canals which are so expensive. The local government should pay for this long-distance movement which is unlikely to do.

Finally, the author explains that building walls to separate the lake into several parts and conduct the freshwater from small rivers into the main part of the lake would be a helpful idea. The speaker, in contrast, rejects the author's view and illustrates the idea that it is impossible that the walls endure a very long period of time. Some phenomenon like a major earthquake will destroy the wall and the freshwater will combine with salty water and will mix the water presented on various sides of the wall with each other.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 223, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'lakes'' or 'lake's'?
Suggestion: lakes'; lake's
...olved the trend which is harmful to the lakes health by pointing out three reasons fo...
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Line 3, column 374, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...lved in the water would be left behind. This materials bring a serious problem and p...
^^^^
Line 7, column 323, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...sible that the walls endure a very long period of time. Some phenomenon like a major earthquak...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, first, furthermore, so, in contrast, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 5.04856512141 277% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1543.0 1373.03311258 112% => OK
No of words: 321.0 270.72406181 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80685358255 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41937970602 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 145.348785872 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545171339564 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 419.366225166 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 21.2450331126 137% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.7198421707 49.2860985944 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.272727273 110.228320801 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1818181818 21.698381199 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0909090909 7.06452816374 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.486714142998 0.272083759551 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.17238144428 0.0996497079465 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.218912001947 0.0662205650399 331% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.317501833539 0.162205337803 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.244275725804 0.0443174109184 551% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.3589403974 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 11.0289183223 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.21 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 63.6247240618 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.7273730684 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.498013245 130% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.2008830022 152% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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